Broken Heart, Broken Promise

Boring video first period+pencil+paper=new poem

Promise
You said you would keep it safe
But you broke it
And now
Its scattered pieces are lost in my aching heart

like a puzzle with missing pieces
You can put me back together
But I'll never be complete

You hurt me
You broke me
You left me in tears

On that rainy morning
When you held my hands
Kissed my forehead
And made that promise
Will be burned in my heart forever

I wish I could return to that time
And walk away before you made me love you

So I could forget these tears and broken promise
And heal the scars that cover my heart

But somehow
For some reason
I can't stop loving you

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh my my this is quite amazing :)
My favorite lines are:

"Like a puzzle with missing pieces
You can put me back together
But I'll never be complete" Wow those three lines really touch me! I can sort of relate to it, too.
I know how it feels to be promised to be loved forever by someone but soon they break it. It's one of the worst feelings to possibly go through. You expressed your feelings really well in this poem. The title is perfect too! The whole thing is actually really good. Keep up the great work. You're really good :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Yeah. We can all relate. Great write

[Nancy]

Very well written, made my heart ache! Your writing has a lot of emotion, that's so good!

[TC Dunn]

lovely...such emotion too over trying to not love someone, but no matter what you do and tell yourself that they're no good for you, you can't seem to get them out of your heart. Wonderfully written.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I love this piece! It's quite beautiful!!! It's amazing how you express the love that won't end, no matter how much you hurt over it. I completely understand!! Wonderful write!!!

[Cass]

Ashley has said it all. It's a great piece. The character (if its not u) is obviously sad over a broken heart, and can't stop loving you for some reason. No one can heal her broken heart but she can't stop loving you. Now that's deep.

You are amazing writer, keep up all the lovely poems, and one day you will be famous. People will pay a lot of money for your poems. Even if there not in a published book yet.

Sorry, I don't think I'm going anywhere with that. I'm just going to go right ahead and say it-I Love the writing, the piece the story, everything! It's perfect. I'm putting it in my (writerscafe) library