Leaving Home

The sunlight warm had cast a charm ,
on my mind today
I could hear aloud and clear ,
please don't go away .

 

I looked around but none I found ,
save the oldest garden tree ,
it seemed somehow every outstretched bough ,
was waving back at me.

 

It pained my heart but I had to start ,
I opened the gate to go ,
every step I took I turned to look ,
my pace so very slow .

 

As I waved goodbye I heard a sigh ,
as wind blew through the grass
A helpless voice ,"I have no choice ,
you may pass you may pass".

 

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

Utterly enchanting and beautiful... I am struck speechless by the emotions in this poem. My eyes filled with tears as I came to the very end, which I must say was closed absolutely superbly. In truth, I was just blown away by the last two lines, without a doubt they left a gut-wrenching impact. There is no place like home. Nowhere better to be but in the one place that holds many of your fondest of memories. I love this piece, Abhijit. Amazingly written.

[Manpreet]

It takes me back to the days I was trying to wrap agony with words. Beautiful expression I would say.

[Lucia Morgan]

this is endearing and you achieved your goal of painting the picture of leaving home.

[Shelly Braen]

Lovely piece. You capture such an adventurous moment, while taking brave albiet hesitant steps. Such a beautiful scene as well, and for some reason, the loving tree reminds me of an ancient olive. Wonderful job!

[Lady]

A very tearful goodbye. Love your words. Simple, yet full of meaning and carefully placed. Very lovely work.

[Suchita]

I find every single work of yours worth reading...:)

[bonbon7810]

This was very well written, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. The mood was very strong and clear. I also thought the picture fit well with the poem.

[Halkhend]

I have to say that this poem is one of the best and most beautiful i have ever had the privlage to read this is wonderful kep it up!!

[Enigma]

Wow. Really, WOW. This was outstanding. Amazing poem! :)

[Lively]

Lovely