angel of the heartbroken

angel of the heartbroken

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Here she comes,

in godly glory,

fairer then the sun.

Till she meets her prince,

she is doomed to stalk,

the cold desolate earth,

till she's no more then dust.

Morn for her,

ungrateful lovers,

berfore her fate is yours.

One day you'll see,

the errors of your ways,

for till death do you part no longer holds is worth.

if you knew the hearts you broke,

if you saw the tears they shed,

than you'll feel her pain,

to late to stop your own.

For there are no such things as fariy tales,

and every love must die.

If only a way to stop the misery

but,

blissful death,

a knife to replace the heart you broke.

© 2011


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You flow naturally and write very well. You might want to check the fourth line for a typo. "Her" prince instead of here? I loved reading this and look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Really enjoyed this piece another great job hun I really liked the vocabulary that you used its really expressive and takes your work to new heights well done keep them coming

Posted 11 Years Ago


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You do have a very impressive way of writing, I really enjoyed this, keep posting and thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful take on the human tragedy of being unable to feel each other's pain. Eloquent emotional expression of somewhere most of us have been. Great job Nixie, keep it coming.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow this is Amazing! You are a really good writer and I love to read you'd poems so thank you for posting!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is outstanding, amazing, and heart moving. I love the way your words flowed together like a melody. It touched my heart and made me want to cry.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Your emotions come through as stong and not whiny, but very sincere, It has a great flow to it as well. HOWEVER I do think you should reread and spellcheck your poetry before posting it. There were a few typos "bissful death" and "then you'll her pain" (You'll what her pain?) Also, I couldn't help but noticed you used 'then' (Describes time) instead of 'than' (Compares two or more things) Fix those up and it would be near perfect!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I was able to imagine the lovers and their fates at the end and I even thought of a song that I used to heard sometime ago. It is a wonderful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love the tale like quality to this, amazing work! Such emotion throughout:)
Reality with majestic stance, lovely work!
xx


Posted 11 Years Ago


i loved the emotion in this poem.
i know the feeling of hurt very well.
great work.
keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago



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