~ Surrexit

~ Surrexit

A Poem by
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~ A poetic story about Trishna

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~ Surrexit


 

In the thirsty streams

Where all the hot

Summer sun was gone

And the reeds of the earth

Were admonished to straw

 

Her hand  grabbed the last

Mud from the water down

There was no clue of being

It was half past dusk

The air was clammy

 

Dry sand filled with craquelé cracks

She felt under her fingernails

It scraped and pecked

She was back on earth

But not more in prosperous states

 

Risen from the dead

In a whirlpool of destruction

Without any need

Or expectation no helping

Hand or any empathy

 

She was nothing but void,

Dead and soulless

In these empty summers

Full of "Trishna" she had to

Crawl until her bones turned to dust

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note



This was just some dark art... hope you sleep well ;)
Thank you xx

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Scary!...(I'm reading this in the wee hours of the night)
Wow Eli, didn't know this side of your art...very refreshing in a haunting way! I love it!...we all have different sides to us that should pour into our work of art once in awhile. This is captivating! Great write, Sis.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Thank you sis, honestly and normally not my type and genre to write about, but some changes now and .. read more



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Claps* There is so much I could say about this poem. [email protected]^ckin brilliant is the first thought. I can't wait to get home and catch this one in all its glory. ^^

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

7 Years Ago

Hah! thank you so much sweetest friend. I am so glad you loved this one.... ;) ;)
oh wow i probably WONT sleep! i can't go through the house in the dark already as it is! gave me shivers great poem elisa!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful dreamer

9 Years Ago

you are welcome no big deal i'll just bring Buddy around the house with me wherever i go. lol but th.. read more

9 Years Ago

Hahahaha....
beautiful dreamer

9 Years Ago

no good! lol :P
You show a darker side here Elisa and show you are in command of many forms equally well. The protagonist here would empathise with Fushia from the Gormenghast stories by Mervyn Peake.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Ah Ken, great review, thank you so much...
absolutely wicked! Well done Sis!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

It was a bit huh, not what they expect from out of my fluffyness....thanks sis xx
As if shadowed fingers unexpectedly touch me in the darkness, the sweat falls from my brow, my breath becomes tethered so, Something supernatural in a hauntingly serene way wraps me of fear and casts my sight beyond the cloud covered moon. As I gasped I clawed for the earth, reaching whatever I might find and there before me stood beauty in the form of words...I read...I felt...I closed my eyes and dreamed. Very nice, Elisa.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Great my friend, this was the near dead experience quite a bit ;) an older one of me, edited... than.. read more
Of course I don't know of "Trishna"

But I know this is a very good write ..

It has a morbid feel of desperation and unquenchable thirst ..

It is delicate .. and reaches far beyond what we as mortals can understand ..

Wow ... Good One Luv ... Jazz xo



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Much love from the cold Netherlands my sweet woman! xoxo
J. J.  Nightingale

9 Years Ago

Be warm, and smile from sun to sun .. :)

9 Years Ago

Yes, always... :) xoxoxo thank you dear!
This is some dark stuff; a nice change that surprised me, great write, gets under your skin. Reminds me of a mix of Poe and King. Love it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Nice you mention those :) yes, not my normally style, but we all have the dark pen somewhere hidden,.. read more
Variety is the spice of your life and here you prove it with a genre i didn't know you wrote... there's a mythical touch to this, a dredging from the past that walks in the shadows of the mind. Fine stuff.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

I think you're close.... :D
emmajoy

9 Years Ago

Of course! To my dreams or nightmares now.. take care of you. zzz

9 Years Ago

Zzzzzies for me soon too, you too ok.... sleep tight! x
You have an absolute knack for imagery and word choice, my friend. I am so very impressed by this piece, it was perfectly penned. I love the way that the piece flowed from start to finish. Fantastic.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend, I came up across this one again, in my huge library, I'm working on som.. read more
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

9 Years Ago

It was beautiful...wow.

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much again :)
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This piece has a horror effect...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

9 Years Ago

It has... not my usual style to write, but I believe everyone has a dark pen somewhere... :)
S

9 Years Ago

its great though...

9 Years Ago

I'm grateful to you, thanks :)

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Tags: Dark Poetry, Dark Art, Darkness, Trishna, Death, Occult, Rest

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