~ The Eye

~ A True Love Story

 

                                                                                  

 ~ The Eye

 

 

He stood in the eye, and danced

On the Iris, turning circles like

He was waiting for salvation

As the wind could bring

Velveteen wings, to his body

To carry him away,

Out from that place where he

Couldn't root as much as he adored

Yet her eye, merged with light

Of the sunbeams, mirrored

The effect between what she felt

Drowned in tears, of happiness

And his long desire to touch her

By knowing he would see her

In three days, separated from now

Where two could melt together in one

In their place of rest of the week

Was illuminating the thought and patience

Their hang out to dance by cold winters

In the snow, and laugh and jump

With La Luna of light above them

Made each warm inside,

Visions, in the next week to another

Each time anew as the years passed

Another day dreamt away, yet two to go

She danced in the eye of future,

He embraced her in their

Sparkling mirrored connection

On both retinas, blood pumping desire

To see an eye of true love

Eye in eye, face to face

As days past by all became the weekly

Love counting years of today

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Stacey Watts]

Very beautiful expression here. The eyes definitely if watched closely can tell a story. This story of love and devotion are sweet. The longing after an absence we can relate too. This story was captivating and exquisite. I love reading your words.

I'm so grateful Stacey to have your presence here, so glad you liked this one

[Art Sun]

nice work Elisa...a nice view into the story of love within poetic melody... has a fairy tale flow to it and reads with the mystical illusion romanticlly expressed...nice musical background...nice...

Thank you my MA-Music-and Poetic Buddy! :)

[Art Sun]

smiling...

:D

[Androglossia]

There's so much anticipation on this write. Foreknowledge is readily seen which is fueled by patience, trust and love. There is nothing that love can't do. This is wonderful.

Thank you so much Maryanne, it's always a pleasure to see you by! Truly happy to see you :)

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome my dear:)

[no sun]

What a beautiful poem. "Eye in Eye" great phrase!!

Thank you for picking that particular part out. Not eye to eye but in eachothers, thanks Ethan!

[no sun]

I love unique phrasing and made up words. Anybody can say roses are red, they will never be as unique as you.

*smiling* Namaste friend

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It is within the eye of the beholder that you have captured a vivid love story... another Master piece!
I love, love, love, the passion that you so eloquently weave into this Beauty Sis! Brilliantly told!

"He was waiting for salvation

As the wind could bring

Velveteen wings, to his body

To carry him away,

Out from a place where he

Didn’t rooted as much as he adored

Yet her eye, merged with light

Of the sunbeams, mirrored

The effect between what she felt

Drowned in tears, of happiness"~ His "Velveteen wings" is a magnificent imagery... Perfection!

Thank you so so much lovely one. It is the true story between me and my hubby, as we lived 7 years separated. Your words mean much to me! love you x

[Robbie~xoxo~]

That is amazing...7years is so long..and the love you share is timeless! Congrats to you both for such a wonderful Love Story!~xo~

Thanks love, it is nice through good and bad, to still have him next to me for another 6 years... I'm grateful for each new year. Muwah from us both! xo

[Kaylor Mason]

That's very oiginal. I don't think I've ever heard love written quite like this before--I'd love to see this in double vision

Thank you very much Kailer :) It happend truly....

[WhiteWillow]

Such a lovely write. I got lost in a wonderland of hope and anticipation. Love filtered through our human eyes is superhuman, and other-worldly. Loved it

Thank you so much, this really happened with my hubbie, we lived for 7 years far away from eachother, and now other 6 years together... all is possible with long time relationships, if your eyes are both wide open to eachother...thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. The use of the eyes gave life and strength to the story. I have always been drawn to woman with beautiful and alive eyes. Like they were hiding something special.
"She danced in the eye of future,"
No weakness in the amazing poetry. Thank you.
Coyote

Thank you Coyote for your keen eyes, and always so honest reviews, truly appreciated! :)

[Ed Hart]

letting you know i stopped by to cast my vote, oh lady of the seeing reach: the eyes have it

Oh thank you Ed, well you can also see more if you allow it, I'm pretty sure ;) thank you for passing by dear friend

[Ed Hart]

thank you, i keep trying

[Muse]

The eyes tell all..don't they sweetie. What a clairvoyant point of view. If we blink...we might fail to see the real you. xo

Thanks hun x

[TheSweet]

Looking at someone means something, looking them in the eye means so much more. Who'd have thought an eye delt so much in a story such as this. Very interesting concept, well written :) Thanks, El.

Thank you very much Sweet. Your opinion always means a lot to me! :)