~ A Feverish Spectrum

~ A Feverish Spectrum

A Poem by
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~ A Delirium of Fever

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~ A Feverish Spectrum



 

Bright sight, 

Became fuzzy in

Loves delight

She blew out the candle

With her mind reflections

Not actually thinking

Words in her head danced

And jumped chaotic

" Shall I? and will I love you?

More than myself

What is love? "

And where did it go?

“It is still with YOU  dear”

You only lost it for a moment

The candle spoke

Out of nothing

With a white mouth

Full of dripping

Candle wax…

“Sssht… keep quiet

She whispered”

Sweaty and shaky

From cold she walked

To her bedstead

Where she disappeared

So small as a leaf

Could be in the stream

Of a moving river

Floating away with

Her thoughts and

Her eyes half open

Staring at the

White starry sky…

Resting until the

Dew was born on

Morning grass

And her cat

Woke her up...

She felt her feverish

Spectrum slowly

Went away

And nothing but a

Bad cold

Remained


 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note

" A vision to what bad flu can bring"



Thank you xx

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~"" Shall I? and will I love you?
More than myself
What is love? "
And where did it go?
“It is still with YOU dear”
You only lost it for a moment
The candle spoke
Out of nothing
With a white mouth
Full of dripping
Candle wax…"
~god - this is a lovely surreal scene!!!~
~"Resting until the
Dew was born on
Morning grass"~
~I LoVe!!!~Crazy as me!!!haha!~
~it's wonderful really!!!~


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wunder

10 Years Ago

~lol~no worries...i still have that ill feeling from last week-
it's pissing me off...stress i.. read more

10 Years Ago

I know all about that... just take the day... don't worry, laugh, live, and love... the rest will co.. read more
wunder

10 Years Ago

~yeah - i need to crash - i slept at this desk last night-blah!-
i'll pop around tomorrow & se.. read more



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It's amazing how a bad flu can bring wonderful thoughts to you my sweet friend. Your words are truly beautiful. my dear. From this poem, one could truly see that your mind is a prism through which beauty could be divided into its infinite spectrum. If flu can always bring such beauty into my mind then I'd rather have one:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Hiii dear, oh thank you so much, glad you found this older piece of me too... :) I remember when I w.. read more
Androglossia

10 Years Ago

I agree:) That's one of the advantages of writing on paper. You're very welcome, dear!

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~"" Shall I? and will I love you?
More than myself
What is love? "
And where did it go?
“It is still with YOU dear”
You only lost it for a moment
The candle spoke
Out of nothing
With a white mouth
Full of dripping
Candle wax…"
~god - this is a lovely surreal scene!!!~
~"Resting until the
Dew was born on
Morning grass"~
~I LoVe!!!~Crazy as me!!!haha!~
~it's wonderful really!!!~


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wunder

10 Years Ago

~lol~no worries...i still have that ill feeling from last week-
it's pissing me off...stress i.. read more

10 Years Ago

I know all about that... just take the day... don't worry, laugh, live, and love... the rest will co.. read more
wunder

10 Years Ago

~yeah - i need to crash - i slept at this desk last night-blah!-
i'll pop around tomorrow & se.. read more
this work just got even more possesing as it went on LOVED IT!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Now that my friend is a thing, we have in common :D feeling feverish,and esp. within a sensitive min.. read more
stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

i can see
Your words here have both the feeling of a warning and a memory of the balance we constantly try to achieve. All it takes to knock us off balance is a fever, but within that fever, the memory of love keeps us from falling. Fevers come and go, while love remains. beautifully creative, as always Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Distant horizons

11 Years Ago

Love right back :-)

11 Years Ago

Thanks sweet friend Lorry :-)
Distant horizons

11 Years Ago

You're welcome sweeter friend Elisa :-)
I hate flu related visions. Never good for me. Great vision for you though.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Nude Writer

11 Years Ago

Hope things cool off soon :)

11 Years Ago

Me too thank you for your care X
The Nude Writer

11 Years Ago

=D no problem
This rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful at the end, and the ambience... Always the ambience.. I appreciate and take in on your poems, and I hope they never stop.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

:) smiling hermano, posted a lot of older stuff, now on top :D so glad you enjoy them! x
Really amazing poem! I admire the way you describe it inside so detailed, beautiful story, as if i`m reading fairytell, in the core of poem. The vision is very clear and arises trills in me, this dream seems so real, the fever is connected with insecure inner feeling of disappearing. i loved the way you describe the candle as real Someone. wonderful, sweet eli!

no♥r ~

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much love, for your support, and truly gifted words... you're such a wise element of na.. read more
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Pax
flu is bad and a bit annoying... you can't do much of anything because your weak... but in your eyes, you've shown what a vivid of forest of thoughts... full of love and emotional pondering of everything around you...it spoke of beauty...

A Wonderful vission....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Oooh how I would love that.... Espresso extra strong and black please ♥
Pax

11 Years Ago

sure! coming up... ♥here♥ i put lots of hugs on it to put away the some nasty pain.... :)

11 Years Ago

Awwww just needed that! thanks so much! :) you're a true SAYANG! (indonesian) :P ♥
Uniquely conceived--whichever of the different interpretations one chooses to attach to this superior piece.
Lovely of lyric, poetess, is your delirium of delights.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
Utterly breathtaking in...a guess...sort of odd sort of way, not odd as in bad, but odd as in good. At first as I read I thought this was actually about illness, but then as I read it again I thought maybe there is some profound meaning that digs much deeper. ^^* Either way it was good to read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for this comment, greatly appreciateted :)

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Added on November 5, 2012
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Tags: E.L. Poetry, Free Verse, Fever, Delirium, Fantasy, Love

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