~ Luna

E.L. Luna, Elisa Laura, Mountains, Nature, Metaphorical, Poetry

~ Luna

Nocturnal delight intoxicated

By dark desires, of shape

Deeper feelings mirrored

Rugged against his skin

She came slowly closer

And made herself so thin

 

Now his face was illuminated

With her sleek pale shape

His eyes so hypnotized

In trance by watching her

In slow motion while she danced

A little around her axis

Her smile became so huge

When she stood in front of him

Her eyes he could imagine

As when her face would glow

He had to wait just a bit longer

Before she would let him show

 

Slightly she passed him by,

Just lost her for another night

He was just so alone and petrified

And couldn’t move along

With his arms he tried to reach her

For she by day just would be gone

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

I found myself most intrigued by that entire last stanza, I reread it a few times, savoring it, trying to figure out where it could lead me. I feel the loss, but also, perhaps the promise of a return, somewhere, sometime... So many interpretations we can give, I love how you don't give all the answers... Your words can live on beyond the conclusion. Bravo. Extra info: I named my cat Luna! ;)

Thank you sithlordjp :) I always enjoy your reviews. And so good you named her Luna, the best name for an animal that connected to her.... :) I feel honored to have you by.

[sithlordjp]

It's a pleasure to discover your work.

I feel honored.... :-)

[krish]

such a awesome poem.that ;u've written down now..............firstly when i'd read out ur's poem tittle;i was so excited to read it damn....& when i started to read it ,i didn't want to end it.......it's so cool...i mean ur's lunar image before start poem & after poem ur's you tube lunar ambition.....all are perfect...........
but here i wanna tell u or or give u my opinion that don't u think that ur's you tube video need's some more...i mean acc. to ur' s poem u should have to paste here that lunar video..which show's or reflect's ur's poetry's word's smoothly.................
any way/....i liked+loved it ....i wanna give u 89/100.
make it bright more if i say, not poem the lunar video.

Thank you Shivam, for all your honesty, and your words, truly appreciated.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A perfect write as only you do. ;)

Aw, thank you sweetheart xx

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I look forward to reading more as soon as I clear my mind of some clutter, if you know what I mean;)

Haha, I know exactly what you mean hun... family first right, also here. I'm popping in too from time to time, when I can... I look forward to you as well, I've missed your beautiful poetry dear, big hugs :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you so much for the hugs :) I need them so. (you have no idea) Until then my friend;)

Now I will give you a 1000 more hugs! tell me everything when you're here and have the time ok? PM me... I will be here for you. xxxx

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You write so beautifully of the night's moon. Enchanting

Thank you Leona :-)

[CS]

The moon goddess and her mountain....how gorgeous, my star sister. I am in love with the line: "in slow motion while she danced a little around her axis". I love this idea of this moon dancing with her lover. As earth and heaven collide in the rythmes of the night. Surely all the stars are smiling in this one for their happiness. She is a beautiful dancer, this lady of the moon :)

So well done, dear Eli.

Thank you so much star sis, for this beautiful review, your words dance too... I hope you're having a great weekend, with much fun! and love and light... Hug for you Courtney xx

[#33]

What an imaginative mind you present!

Thank you very much :)

[Distant horizons]

How beautifully expressed. perfectly capturing the photograph, as well as the mind. This is structured so well as to be perfect with the photo, and still perfect without, instead painting an altogether different image in the mind. onderfully done Elisa

Yes, thank you my sweet friend, for noticing the freedom in this, you were the first :-) the fact of loosing, not touching, just breathing... the way of nature, and it's natural flowing essence. Nothing to do with real love or being in love.... just how the mountain watched "La Luna" for decates.... you must be Scottish LOL :-)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

:-) and I meant: " eras, decades " ... sorry for my bad fuzzy Eli mind sometimes LOL... always great to have you by!

[Distant horizons]

I understood perfectly dear. Glad you understand my shrekness too :-)

:-) Your shrekness is like I mailed you LOL :-) wonderful ;-)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh I love this! It felt like a dance...slow to intertwine, hypnotizing. This reminds me of the "lady and the hawk", when Michelle Pfeiffer's character turns into a hawk by night, and misses her lover as he turns into a wolf by day. They are cursed. Never to meet by day or night... only when it passes each other by seconds. This piece has the same bittersweet dance... beautifully written!

Amazing sis you mention that movie..... you remind me of it YES, that perfectly could be~ :) Thank you for your imput as always, and the bright eyes.... X

[J. J. Nightingale]

Tempting, sensual ... captivating ...

Beautiful ..

Jazz ... wow !!

Thank you with whole my heart dear sweet woman!!! :) X

[J. J. Nightingale]

xx :).................

♥

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

You remake ordinary topics for poems and typical titles into silken bouquets and dreamy hurrahs.

Like a diamond grinder at work in slow motion, I can almost read your lips! Ely!

It is how I saw the mountain, loving la Luna.... thank you so much Michael, for your insights. :)

[Edward Beaman]

I forget briefly that this poem was about the moon and was wondering what type of woman would tease and then leave a man like that. ;-) Ah the moon! That floozy.

It's a lovely poem with beautiful imagery. I especially like the opening lines. You capture well the yearning, together with the lonliness.

Thank you very much Edward, for your insights, however this poem was based on half truth half fiction, you're close.... I love to play with metaphors, and give my readers thoughts, :) so glad you were here. Thank you. Appreciated.

- Elisa