~ The Voice of Silence

~ The Voice of Silence, E.L. Elisa Laura, Freestyle Poetry, Near Death Experiences, River, Illness, Sad Poem, Fantasy, Streams, Water, Love, Life, Heartbeats, Spiritual, Nature

~ The Voice of Silence

 

 

 

When you stood there upon the stream

Your eyes, so pointed at me,

I tried, but couldn’t reach you

Just too much water in between

 

Then you tried to scream at me

Lips moving like a slow motions act

Your hands around your mouth,

The only thing I heard were just whispers

You were there, silently loud

 

The only thing that I could do, 

Was waving with my hands 

To make you move along your way,

To let you run away from me,

With me you couldn’t stay

 

But on the end of the river

I found your body there, and all alone

Not knowing, I moved myself with you

I must have jumped into the river,

But alas, I was too late, you were gone…

 

So I cried in silence,

And moved along my road,

Still hearing those whispers

Those silent whispers, 

And near me a heartbeat of yours

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The silent whispers of death do come to us well before our time is up. They remind us to cherish every day and to live each day as if it was the last. After hearing those whispers, a person is changed forever. This explains why your poetry is so deeply moving, sweet friend. May you be able to write it for many years. Knuffels, Lydi**

Lieverd, bedankt voor je mooie mail, Ik zal snel reageren :) you understand this one so well.... exactly... there is so much more, and it changes you forever... your words touch me deep.

Eli xx and knuffels :)

[Jack...]

Desire is pouring from your words. The need, the want but the realization that it is all or nothing. The picture you created in my mind was one of wonderment and softness, pure colors running into one another. The silence so loud, yet so beautiful, trance like. I could hear the river rushing, the splash as you enter, the hope and then the sadness. this was stunning. It is as if I gazed upon a beautiful painting that spoke tender words to me.

Thank you very much Jack, for your time, and review your words are so appreciated. -- Elisa

[Belle]

When you stood there upon the stream
Your eyes, so pointed at me,
I tried, but couldn’t reach you
Just too much water in between

It is powerfully hurting to be so near with the one we love yet we feel so far;
it will only gives us fleeting desire to dive in to the water to just feel his heartbeat.

A bitter sweet taste of love.

Thank you very much for these words sister Belle, xx

[Horizon K.]

To try so hard to connect, but yet unrealized. Hearts that cannot speak to each other, despite the efforts. And whispers, though heard, not deciphered. And I agree with sithlordjp below, this was incredibly dreamlike. And so fluid in its form, through your words and your feelings and this water you have drawn, that I am moved.

And dearest Elisa, you know how we are so truly connected? I just wrote a poem that this so reminds me of... I haven't put in on WC though since it didn't feel finished yet....

xx Horizon

Thank you so very much sweet sister, yes this was very dreamy, it was unconscious ;-) you felt it... As he did, I know how connected we are, I can't wait to read your piece... Your words move me... All my love, xx

[captain]

silences between two lovers torn apart by the rivers of time, sorrow, pain, mistakes and etc. wonderful work

Thank you sweetie

[Androglossia]

Some good things are not meant to be more than a moment. They just take their place in your heart in a while to prepare you for the next time. I loved the imagery, my dearest. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you dearest for your thoughts, on this write...
It is strainge to explain this write after you know the true meaning...
I will tell you it one day :) And then it's just a moment that lived for longer.... your words always make me ponder, and that is so good! xxx

[Androglossia]

I'm willing to wait for that 'one day', Eli:) You are always welcome.

Thank you love xxx

[sithlordjp]

Oh Elisa, what a wonderful piece this is... To have love jsut in front of you, and to be unable to reach it, is heartbreaking. Really great use of imagery throughout. The treacherous water, element of life... easily turned into an elemet of death, the death of love... "Just too much water in between" The fear to drown, to be suffocated, an emotion so similar to being pulled away from the One we care about. I liked the dream like quality of some of your lines, such as: "Lips moving like a slow motions act" I was deeply moved by that last stanza. The loss is felt. By replacing the river by: "And moved along my road," I pictured a silent, cold and dry highway, with no exit in sight...

Thank you so much my friend for a wonderful review, it is so beautiful to see what my write did with your thoughts... :) I'm very grateful to you. - Elisa

[Debbie_Philly]

Very haunting piece.... sad... I liked it !!

Yes, it's a sad write... in between my others... but thank you so much dear X

[Birdman313]

A great poem and the video made it even better

Thank you Birdman :)

[kublakhan27]

A stunning and devastating image, which you've brought to life with haunting beauty...I think there's a lot of room for interpretation with this one too...great work as always Elisa :)

Thank you with whole my heart dear friend, yes, you felt it right, it is a piece I wrote last year, june... coulnd't post it before, needed to be strong strong for it... I guess... I will explain you this in private. :) thank you so much for your words friend *tears*

[kublakhan27]

*Hugs* it's quite alright my friend...I relate in ways I have already elaborated on elsewhere :) You are strong, and you are a survivor...never forget that :)

Muwah! xx your words mean much to me my friend! I carry you with me always!

[kublakhan27]

And you with me...all the best Elisa, stay strong :)

Always :-) you too ok? :)

[kublakhan27]

I promise :)

That makes a pinky promise lol :D xx

[kublakhan27]

Sounds good to me haha :D

[Distant horizons]

Has such a sad, dreamlike quality to your words. The impotency of being just out of reach, too late, unheard. The soft urgency of the words could be the fear of a close bond breaking, but the last line shows they will always be there with you. Beautiful images your words always create in my head Elisa

Thank you dear friend.... yes, you felt all right... will explain this vision to you soon, better... your words though are brightening my day(s) always. Hope your router is fixed soon :) take care (x)

[Distant horizons]

I fixed it myself somehow :-)
Maybe it new I was going to kick it out the window :-)

he he... (I know these moments very well) lol patience is the key, as a IT-er... :P Good you fixed it dear :D

[Distant horizons]

:-)