~ The Silent Rose

~ The Silent Rose, Elisa Laura, E.L. Romance, "The Man on Fire" Poetry

~ The Silent Rose

 

 

Words spoken out loud,

In a dream of silence

Days, run away like trains

On rusty railways

Doors open, for new passengers

But I'm holding on my rose,

Petals with each a story

To climb in my daily mind

To tell me; as they keep me moving

With the color of deep red

Fragrance and mortality,

Are born in little treasures...

I Watch them fall down

Piece by piece slowly on my knee

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Inspired by a favorite Movie of me... :)
Thank you xx

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Splendid imagery in this one, Elisa. I could almost see the petals falling slowly and tickling her knee. The music is hauntingly beautiful! "Days, run away like trains on rusty railways" heart touching emotion here, my friend. Excellent work. Knuffels, Lydi**

Thank you so much Lydi... so glad you enjoyed this. Heel veel knuffels... good to see you back!!! :)

[SimpleMind]

Wow~...

:)

[Andie]

Ooo, I love this. :)
If I close my eyes after I read this, it takes me somewhere. Wonderful. :)

Thank you so much, then my job is done, when my readers are taken away, to some new places.... :) be back for you ;)

[Andie]

You've done your job very well. :)

Thanks again xxx

[Andie]

Anytime! :)

[Rachel Anderson]

"Petals with each story." Love that line. Good job.

Thank you so much :) I will be back for you :D

[Baby Ricochet]

"Days run away like trains on rusty railways." God that's beautiful. Outstanding work EL

Thank you BR :) glad you liked this one... hey I will be back for your writes... sorry I couldn't do it this night. Just have a little spare time... but I won't forget! ;)

[Tina Kline]

A very well written poem. There is beauty and sadness here, all wrapped up with life.

Thank you very much Tina :) and you're right :)

[Alina-Sofia]

I loved it

Thanks :)

[Alina-Sofia]

welcome

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi, very nicely poised I felt, I enjoyed her armomatic train journey

Hi dear, thankies :D

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

There is a lot of great imagery here. I love the idea of the rose in opposition to the more metallic and industrial things like railways and trains. Nature vs. Industry...with a little romance added in. Nicely done.

Thanks Girl Friday! I like your review, I think it was my natural juxtaposition posed out here lol..

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This is such an awesome poem. Your beautiful imagery of rose petals and the train yard really paint a magnificent painting in my head.

"Days, run away like trains
On rusty railways
Doors open, for new passengers
But I'm holding on my rose,
Petals with each a story" sooooooo gooood :))))))))))))))))))))))

Early morning sweet Cord, it's nice to wake up with a friend like you! thank you so much for these words... they mean the world to me! :) love, Eli

[Michael G. Smith]

Bravo, mastery of verse. Simplicity and I journeyed so far with thee in mere moment.

Thank you so very much Michael. Means a lot to me.