~ There Where the Trees Danced

~ There Where the Trees Danced, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Other Dimensions, Fiction, Free style

~ There Where the Trees Danced

 

 

Yes  finally ...

 

 

There was light, after days of darkness

An early morning sun, smiled

 

 

                       The fog became a soft cotton blanket

                       The trees awoke with every sparkling

 

 

Slow movements, and limbs

The time delay in all presence

 

 

                       There was more oxygen, we survived

                       Did we? awakened from a dark wandering

 

 

Without gravity, or am I dreaming?

The trees seem to dance, without roots

 

 

                        I wonder where we are, where are we?

                        In mind? or reality?

 

 

There Where the Trees Danced

I felt your hand in mine...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thanks for your entry... ;) xx

Reviews

[Kristallo]

This one flows with such harmony, and the imagery here is profoundly beautiful. "The trees awoke with every sparkling" is such a tender line, each couplet is sublime and visually tasteful. Each couplet is as artistically satisfying as the one preceding it, although I would have liked to see perhaps one more addition, it seemed to end so abruptly. But this was utopia in words. Very rhythmic and lovely. Great write.

Thank you so much dear Kristallo, I am so pleased you enjoyed this, and found it visually tasteful, it was my intention to make real imagery and kind of "film fragments" to my readers, I'm glad you said that. I will think of another more addition, thanks for suggesting me that. I'm grateful with your presence here. Thanks again :) - Elisa

[A.A.Romanczuk]

There where the trees danced, I too have danced
I too have felt the absence of gravity
In the presence of a slender hand
Dreaming in the shelter of mine
I too have danced, dreamed in the early morning light
Where all things Once Upon A Time are possible

Beautiful words, dear, thank you for being here x

[A.A.Romanczuk]

x most welcome you are

[Larry Dyson]

hmmm what all of the faeirie time and goblin guilds are about my friend.Laury

*wink* :D

[A.A.Romanczuk]

:D tis Laury! tis dance time indeed!

[Larry Dyson]

Thanx AA

[A.A.Romanczuk]

:D

[Larry Dyson]

ah...there you 2 are...WC moves this around so much.lovely faerie music and written word..

[kublakhan27]

Very cool concept and metaphor :) One of my new favourites from your catalogue...great work my friend :) xox

*bows* to you, thank you my friend xo

[kublakhan27]

Always my pleasure :)

[Jack...]

Amazing, the last two lines took my breath and stole my mind. So very captivating was this poem.
Elisa, I scrolled back up to copy and paste my favorite lines and found that the only way I could do that was to copy and paste the entire piece into this box. And still as I gaze upon it, each and every line captivates me and captures me, locks me away and tosses the key to the wind. Each line was a beautiful bouquet of fragrant dreams and I can not seem to release it.

Still, I may sound contradictive but, the last two lines I am certain will out live me on this earth yet exist somewhere in my mind when I find what is on the other side. Simply beautiful.

Jack thank you so much. I'm pleased that this could enchant the reader... (YOU). What a great review, you always understand my mind :) I'm grateful for this review. - Elisa