~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer

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~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

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~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


Author's Note



Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

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There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)
TheSweet

10 Years Ago

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm gl.. read more

10 Years Ago

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everyt.. read more



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"so he left, skittish." such a great line and really the tell tell here. I love this and I love you!! Brilliant write. I love the imagery. xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Hi 10, uh 5, high 15 even ;) can't wait to hear your new pieces.... my hero! ♫
joshua deathdealer

10 Years Ago

well im working on a nirvana song called sappy and a silverstien song called my heroin...I'll send .. read more

10 Years Ago

Oh, yes please... I'm all ears, and I know I will enjoy!!! xx
Your words always fascinate, always touch, but this intrigues, takes thoughts way off and away, 'And he trusted the stars above him; ~ When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky ~ He knew time was just a phase,' .. and so it is, Elisa, so it is. Enjoy your break, twin spirit.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you my Twin-Love... for the trust, friendship, love, and compassion.... it means the world to .. read more
What lovely breathtaking piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lover Of Words

10 Years Ago

Same here sweet heart take your time im here if you need

10 Years Ago

Muwah! to you, thanks for the patience..... chat soon!
Lover Of Words

10 Years Ago

My pleasure dear
Your poems are so sophisticated and chic. I love them. The story you tell makes it all the better and interesting. I loved the wording and flow. You have great meter and imagery, too. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear one... :) your words make me smile. Back soon for you xx
I relate to this quite well. I felt the emotion in every line, as I too bear the memories of a moment now lost in time. Well done... Your work has brought tears to my eyes. Hahaha

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my dear friend... awww, I cried too while I wrote it..... so we cry together then .. read more
....and those are the most beautiful moments, in those twelve days...
What reverie brought her solace
through his doe eyes, is also her salvation...
with purpose, souls are meant to seek
and to salvage one another...

This is a beautiful message of how souls transform us...
through every walk of life...leaving footprints...




Gorgeous penning, Sis!~xoxo~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

P.s. I meant talkative... little typo...
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

Hey, that's why I love you (typos and all) lol...you are real.
Never change,Eli...xxxx

10 Years Ago

Awww, and I you! on whatever you are typing on LOL ;) ♥ I go for a while now, need to rest my mind.. read more
And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,
Leaving his footprints in the snow.


He was her deer …

Methinks this is not about a deer … I knew a squirrel like that. Transportive, Elilsa.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the nice comment Pryde... you always brighten my days, and lovely new photo of you! :)
Pryde Foltz

10 Years Ago

Thank you, Elisa.

10 Years Ago

Thanks for all, I appreciate you, you write beautifully, and will be back with an review episode soo.. read more
Oh this is just plain lovely. A beautiful vision shared with us, Elisa. Gratitude!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

From of the road, thank you so much my friend....
wow, this is so sad...he could be her love...but he is skittish like the deer...and runs as if from the sound of a car in the distance, getting to close.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Nicely worded, thank you jacob

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Tags: ~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

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