~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

 

~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

Reviews

[TheSweet]

There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Ah you got this one so very well my friend, that was exactly the right (somhow anxious) feeling, I want to bring over in it. Wonderful you speak of this... it's truly an amazing review my friend. Thank you :)

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)

[TheSweet]

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm glad I was close to your intention though, I was wondering if I was just rambling about nothing. It was a really nice write though, good job!

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everything" the same time ;) Thank you dearly, I try to come by to you as well. :)

[Rock]

This transcends words
I'm touched in unfamiliar places

Thank you so much Rock :) I appreciate your comment.

[Fernando Dardón]

damn, you are so good girl!!! But, you know what? this time, I must accept it, it was just too much for me. I’m not that metaphorical to understand the whole sense of your poem. u.u
nevertheless I loved it!

Gracias hermanito.... means much to me! it's code... I know lol ;)

[Fernando Dardón]

this poem was like standing in front of a painting of a famous painter and staring at it. Ill probably couldn’t be able to understand the meaning of the image, but could love the colours and shapes which is composed of
:D

I know you could, because you feel the music.... :) sometimes it goes beyond all logic ;) many thanks again.... your words mean much to me.