A Lost Society

They lie to you

      in hopes that you may believe

      in what they have said.

 

So you become of the fools

      and they will feed off your kind

      for solely their benefit.

 

It is not only the stupid

but the foolish ashamed to stand up for what they believe.

 

                         In the end they will atone

    for their lack of care

                 with crippled lives

                 and corrupted lies

                                   within dens

                                   built of weakened ties

  

                  Of humane bonds

                     that scream their cries.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poem have many hidden meanings. I believe here in the USA. We are being led to the slaughter and not fighting for our freedom. In Europe they will stand in millions to change things. Last lines are true. Liars and thief will get their reward in the end. No change had been done without violence in 60 years. A powerful poem. You made me think. Thank you.
Coyote

[manifesto]

You read this at Writer's Block once, right? It was amazing then, and still is, and I love its sad, eerie feeling. So much of human behaviour is explained here. We have a need to feel safe and secure, and for that we will believe almost anything that is told to us. And of course, karma's always there. ;)

[Aven]

"In the end they will atone
for their lack of care"

Leaves me with a creepie, yet satisfying thought. You can expand alot on these lines alone.

Great Write!

[David W Moore III]

I like this, I di think that the majority might stand up for what they believed if they were given the truth to begin with, but we are easily beguiled. Maybe that is our weakness, we look for the lie to hide behind and believe because it is easier...

[Abigail T]

Wow, that ending really got me. So creepy and disturbing, but a fabulous ending! I also love your title. I'm not sure I understand your format, but it intrigues me. Great job!

[nono]

All of your work seems interesting I like it very intriguing! I like it the thoughts the tittles your written word all very nice!

[Jordan]

Our country has changed so much over a few decades, it is like we have lost our heart or traded it in for the promise of gold. No longer do we stand up or fight back instead we are asleep at the wheel of a speeding car with no destination. I miss the old America it was more raw and yet more strong at the same time.

[micayla3]

Great job

[carmz]

whoaaaa
i love the way you write it...
nice poem it has lots of ideas to be said

[Matthew Kult]

Hello SaimaS,

First, I like the layout/format, it's unique. I thought it would take away from the Poem, but it did not. Secondly, I like your wording. You definately thought this out before laying it out. Impressive work.

I like to think of myself in a lost society. Not so much to be cool, and not to just strut around. But I feel I am in a losing battle to save a genre I love. Horror is where it all starts. What is horror now a days, but a good looking hunk chasing the flavor of this year. Sad really, and honestly, I am sure you don't want to hear about my personal battles, although I think everyone should.

Have i told you about my eye fetish? Oh wait, not another rant I am sure you are thinking. Fine fine, I won't go into it. You have a gem here, well written, well thought out, and incredible. Good work.

Always,

Jaidyn