AWASH IN THINGS UNSEEN

AWASH IN THINGS UNSEEN

A Poem by M. L. F.
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Of belief & disbelief in unseen things...And to those whose eyes are open wide to the realms of the shadows of good & evil, and those whose are locked shut...Of one man who uses lies & logic to hide..

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I WONDER AS I DRIFT HERE LOST IN THUNDEROUS IMAGINATIONS

IF SEEING GHOSTS IN EVERY CORNER TIS MAD MAN’S ABBERRATION

THE DREAMING DAYS BLEED INTO NIGHT AWASH IN THINGS UNSEEN

AND YET I SEE BEYOND THICK FROST THROUGH OTHERS’ MYSTERIES

THE SLEEPING MAN SHALL WIELD HIS LOGIC LIKE A MIGHTY SWORD

BUT ALL THE WHILE HIS EYES ARE SHUT TO TRUTHS HE CAN’T AFFORD

HE SMEARS HIMSELF IN EVIL LIES TO TWIST TRUTH INTO THEORY

YET ALL THE WHILE THE UNDERWORLD EXISTS AMIDST THOSE HEARING

THE SECRET PATH THAT OPEN EYES ENVISION IS NEVER LOST

AND THOSE WHO SEEK ITS TRUTH AVAIL TO PAY ITS HEAVY COST

I WONDER STILL WHILE DRIFTING LOST IN THUNDEROUS IMAGINATIONS

IF LIGHT AND DARKNESS EVEN CROSS THEIR LOGICAL CONTEMPLATIONS

© 2016 M. L. F.


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Best piece I've read so far. I dig the rhymes and flow. Trapped in dark and being lost. Everybody search for light and truth. I've been there in the corners. Can you blame me?
The better path will open up to you finding yourself in the sight of belief. That's where it led me. Enlightening to me to find myself PARTLY in this ghost of a man you write about but light has washed me purer already. My attempt to leave a less shallow review, ms.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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M. L. F.

2 Years Ago

I believe the better path opens up to you when you die to yourself / flesh and let in the light that.. read more
LostBoy

2 Years Ago

My favourite too. Well put Misty. I relate to your pov.

Lovely Name btw.



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SKY
Your words certainly describes the depth of imagination. "The sleeping man shall wield his logic like a mighty sword"

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

I appreciate the review. Yes, the sleeping man uses his logic to defend all that he does, to make s.. read more
This sounds like one of our political campaigns going on now here in America. It's dark and dreary, much like our future.
I loved this phrase,"But all the while his eyes are shut to truths he can't afford."
Great stuff.

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Hahaha!!! Hilarious! Yes true, I think it is pretty bleak for you guys these days back in the good.. read more
Fabulous. One of my fav. Poetry. Liked... even loved the composition of your words. Rhythmic pattern is whole what makes your write rhythmically reading. Deep thoughts. Extraordinary visions. And a very beautifully presented poetry you come up with. Keep up the great work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you sir..
"thunderous imaginations"... two long words at the end don't read well with me?
*Capitalise your 'i's or keep them all small? Richy does this a lot lol.
'tis' - Can I ask why you used this word?
"through others' mysteries"

Yeah. Like it overall, just the long words in first line and two last lines don't flow well? Could you say 'thunderous imagining'? It would mean changing the end of the second line then...

You rhyme some lines yet not others. Is this intentional?

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Sounds like ripe writing fruit, ready for the picking ;) Time to spill your ink...
Elise Anton

3 Years Ago

Haha, I have... (had to stop and count) 10 word docs open as we speak. I meander from one to the oth.. read more
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Ha! Me too... I have four open as we speak, which I jump between. Good to hear I am not the only cr.. read more
One of the best I have read on this site...if you have published any book, I want buy a sign copy. Looking forward to read more of your work! This was Magnum-opus.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Love it!
You did a great job intertwining a thoughtful (that's not the right work--I can't put my finger on what I want to say) thread through the poem: "...man shall wield his logic like a mighty sword...". I also love the line "the secret path that open eyes envision is never lost". It transported me to remember that the path we're on is always there.
Thank you!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thanks Zoli, I am glad you got the vibe of it, and thank you for the read :)
Misty..
Interesting perspective on this dichotomy. The eerie atmosphere utilised on one part in contrast to the other makes the differences more visible, well done. I really enjoyed reading it and musing on it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I wanted the atmosphere to feel eerie so I am glad it the piece had that sensat.. read more
An eerie metaphor for our subconscious lives. The “id” if you will. My sleeping man wanders in my dreams and sometimes takes me to places I don't want to go; memories I thought were buried.

Very good. Has a Lovecraft feel to it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Aah... My very favorite fellow fiction writer emerges ;) Yes you are right, I had not thought of ou.. read more
Robert Parlange

3 Years Ago

Oops! Misinterpreted that one. You're right, closed minds do miss a lot of cool stuff. I visited a r.. read more
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Ha!! I grew up in three separate houses with haunting experiences... I think maybe the haunting thin.. read more
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amazing write...insightful...enriched imagery {that's quite unique}
... intriguing and mystical...mixed with a subtle hint of darkness.
love the title. Thank you for sharing

I also thank you for subscribing. looking forward to reading more
of your ink drops (:

~ x - barrie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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3 Years Ago

you're very welcome, enjoyed the read - take care (:
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3 Years Ago

I enjoy horror as well...well meandering around the dark side (macabre)...
sounds like we hav.. read more
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

And I look forward to sharing...

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