STRIPPED

"Let it go", he said
"How will you see - that I am you-
and you are me?"
Our thoughts, our souls cohesive ease
I am the water
You're the tree
I'll pour my soul into you now
allow it, stripped-
to trickle down
Your honey drips upon my lips
My veils of trust-
- but sunken ships
My Insides melt to liquid gold
and trickle fire to southern folds
You find me there -
and break the holds
The fears that shackled - shattered - sold
upon your lips such honey words
"If you're a bird -
then I'm a bird
You're viscous words slip into me
like honey warm - I finally see...
what you have known eternally..
That I am you -
And you are me...

© 2017 M. L. F.

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Manu

Wow, wow misty ! I really loved the whole way you wrote this piece. We all do crave for that kind of boundless and egoless love and connection in our lives especially from the opposite gender but very few have that kind of fate to understand and experience that..Those raw emotions are very nicely expressed here...truly a great piece..keep it up. :-) :-) Wow, wow misty ! I really loved the whole way you wrote this piece. We all do crave for that kind of boundless and egoless love and connection in our lives especially from the opposite gender but very few have that kind of fate to understand and experience that..Those raw emotions are very nicely expressed here...truly a great piece..keep it up. :-) :-) Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Glad to hear the thoughts behind the piece came through for you clearly. Ideal indeed... Thank you for the kind review.. ..Misty

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Chris

A sensuous thought flow... and a wish... A sensuous thought flow... and a wish... Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 6 Years Ago Thank you Chris.

LostBoy

Sounds like love. Stripped indeed. You write in cotton clouds and sensuality. I REALLY enjoyed this poem. I'm attracted to sweetness and soul. Sounds like love. Stripped indeed. You write in cotton clouds and sensuality. I REALLY enjoyed this poem. I'm attracted to sweetness and soul. Rating /100

genocide

this is written very well I like this this is written very well I like this Rating /100

Coyote Poetry

I loved how you used the language. "My veils of trust- - but sunken ships My Insides melt to liquid gold and trickle fire to southern folds" The above lines I liked . Your description create visions and thoughts for the reader. I did liked the ending. Perfect closure to the poem. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry. Coyote I loved how you used the language. "My veils of trust- - but sunken ships My Insides melt to liquid gold and trickle fire to southern folds" The above lines I liked . Your description create visions and thoughts for the reader. I did liked the ending. Perfect closure to the poem. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry. Coyote Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you for stopping by to read the piece Coyote. I am glad you like the language usage in my work. The same can be said for yours. :) I appreciate the review.. ..Misty Coyote Poetry 7 Years Ago You are welcome Misty. I love your work.

Manu

Wow, wow misty ! I really loved the whole way you wrote this piece. We all do crave for that kind of boundless and egoless love and connection in our lives especially from the opposite gender but very few have that kind of fate to understand and experience that..Those raw emotions are very nicely expressed here...truly a great piece..keep it up. :-) :-) Wow, wow misty ! I really loved the whole way you wrote this piece. We all do crave for that kind of boundless and egoless love and connection in our lives especially from the opposite gender but very few have that kind of fate to understand and experience that..Those raw emotions are very nicely expressed here...truly a great piece..keep it up. :-) :-) Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Glad to hear the thoughts behind the piece came through for you clearly. Ideal indeed... Thank you for the kind review.. ..Misty

Bala Gorthi

A very beautifully written piece, Misty! I like the way you brought the message home. Until the state of losing oneself the "i" factor the real melting of souls is not possible. This is an exceptional piece! Thanks for sharing this.... A very beautifully written piece, Misty! I like the way you brought the message home. Until the state of losing oneself the "i" factor the real melting of souls is not possible. This is an exceptional piece! Thanks for sharing this.... Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. View 0 more replies M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you for the compliment.. I am glad you found the work powerful. This is how I feel on the matter of the two souls joining: This verse explains it MUCH better than I ever could... Mark: 10:8 ..... "…7‘For this reason a man will leave his father and mother and be united to his wife, 8and the two will become one flesh.’ So they are no longer two, but one flesh. 9Therefore what God has joined together, let man not separate.”… That is the fusing of souls ...the sort of relationship this piece adheres and speaks to... This is NO ordinary love.. :) Thanks again for taking time to read and review my work.. much appreciated. ..Misty PhoenixDown 7 Years Ago Well said. Extraordinary love can be difficult to see, unless you are within its bubble. This comment has been deleted by the poster.

LapseOfMind

Wow, very well done! This was truly a pleasure to read! Wow, very well done! This was truly a pleasure to read! Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you very much.. I am happy you liked the work.. ..Misty

YanZeros

Took me awhile to understand the story behind this poetry. :D And I must say this one is yieldingly intense! Took me awhile to understand the story behind this poetry. :D And I must say this one is yieldingly intense! Rating /100 M. L. F. 7 Years Ago This one is about letting go... letting go of the chains that bind... the walls we build high around our trust... about the moment we all are lucky enough to find the one person we connect with subliminally... on an undercurrent...a wavelength and frequency only you and he can hear... sounds deep and mythical. BUT it can be real... I never thought it was possible to this degree.. but it seems I was wrong and that is the interpretation of this piece... in a nutshell. Glad you found it a work of intensity. The emotions behind it are raw and intense. Powerful. Thank you for your time and for reading my work.. ...Misty YanZeros 7 Years Ago You're welcome Misty :) and thank you for giving the story behind this poem you wrote it beautifully!

Paul Bell

Like the slow build up to this. The journey it takes. Leaves you thinking. Well done. Like the slow build up to this. The journey it takes. Leaves you thinking. Well done. Rating /100 M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you.. I try to pace the pieces up to the reveal. Thank you for the review. ..Misty

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Woah...yeah I like this one Misty...pours life fine wine. The fusing of souls, can be both violent and breathtaking. A beautiful balance of light and dark. I love your flawless expressions. Starz x Woah...yeah I like this one Misty...pours life fine wine. The fusing of souls, can be both violent and breathtaking. A beautiful balance of light and dark. I love your flawless expressions. Starz x Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Breathtaking indeed.. ;) Thank you for seeing the depth of the piece..of it's emotion, it's heart Starz. And thanks for taking the time to read me again... ..Misty

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[Manu]

Wow, wow misty !
I really loved the whole way you wrote this piece. We all do crave for that kind of boundless and egoless love and connection in our lives especially from the opposite gender but very few have that kind of fate to understand and experience that..Those raw emotions are very nicely expressed here...truly a great piece..keep it up. :-) :-)

[M. L. F.]

Glad to hear the thoughts behind the piece came through for you clearly. Ideal indeed... Thank you for the kind review..
..Misty

[Chris]

A sensuous thought flow... and a wish...

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Chris.

[LostBoy]

Sounds like love. Stripped indeed. You write in cotton clouds and sensuality.

I REALLY enjoyed this poem. I'm attracted to sweetness and soul.

[genocide]

this is written very well I like this

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the language.
"My veils of trust-
- but sunken ships
My Insides melt to liquid gold
and trickle fire to southern folds"
The above lines I liked . Your description create visions and thoughts for the reader. I did liked the ending. Perfect closure to the poem. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for stopping by to read the piece Coyote. I am glad you like the language usage in my work. The same can be said for yours. :) I appreciate the review..
..Misty

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Misty. I love your work.

[Bala Gorthi]

A very beautifully written piece, Misty!
I like the way you brought the message home. Until the state of losing oneself the "i" factor the real melting of souls is not possible.
This is an exceptional piece! Thanks for sharing this....

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for the compliment.. I am glad you found the work powerful. This is how I feel on the matter of the two souls joining: This verse explains it MUCH better than I ever could...
Mark: 10:8 .....
"…7‘For this reason a man will leave his father and mother and be united to his wife, 8and the two will become one flesh.’ So they are no longer two, but one flesh. 9Therefore what God has joined together, let man not separate.”…
That is the fusing of souls ...the sort of relationship this piece adheres and speaks to... This is NO ordinary love.. :)

Thanks again for taking time to read and review my work.. much appreciated.
..Misty

[PhoenixDown]

Well said. Extraordinary love can be difficult to see, unless you are within its bubble.

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, very well done! This was truly a pleasure to read!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much.. I am happy you liked the work..
..Misty

[YanZeros]

Took me awhile to understand the story behind this poetry. :D And I must say this one is yieldingly intense!

[M. L. F.]

This one is about letting go... letting go of the chains that bind... the walls we build high around our trust... about the moment we all are lucky enough to find the one person we connect with subliminally... on an undercurrent...a wavelength and frequency only you and he can hear... sounds deep and mythical. BUT it can be real... I never thought it was possible to this degree.. but it seems I was wrong and that is the interpretation of this piece... in a nutshell. Glad you found it a work of intensity. The emotions behind it are raw and intense. Powerful. Thank you for your time and for reading my work..
...Misty

[YanZeros]

You're welcome Misty :) and thank you for giving the story behind this poem you wrote it beautifully!

[Paul Bell]

Like the slow build up to this. The journey it takes.
Leaves you thinking. Well done.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you.. I try to pace the pieces up to the reveal. Thank you for the review.
..Misty

[...]

Woah...yeah I like this one Misty...pours life fine wine. The fusing of souls, can be both violent and breathtaking. A beautiful balance of light and dark. I love your flawless expressions. Starz x

[M. L. F.]

Breathtaking indeed.. ;) Thank you for seeing the depth of the piece..of it's emotion, it's heart Starz. And thanks for taking the time to read me again...
..Misty