APOCALYPTIC SKIES

APOCALYPTIC SKIES

A Poem by M. L. F.

The earth's light extinguished like a wick at Seven

To hollowed earth stars were hurled


His anger grew wings and he thrashed against Heaven

Causing darkness and chaos to swirl...

His Angel, in horror, neath the shower of stars

Watched his wings crash against Heaven's gates


Her love, her Phoenix caused tribulation...

War

Fighting God for his Angel's fate

For The two had Intertwined now..

In a way that no one knew

How his tears left such stains now..

Cold obsidian colored hues..

on her heart as he fell down, landing safely in her arms

Where she pet his curly head now and she quelled his false alarm

Lay with me here on this dark night..

Pray the stars all realign

Long as we two still are left now,

Neath Apocalyptic Skies...

© 2017 M. L. F.


Author's Note

M. L. F.


I see that this piece can come off a bit too cryptic, so this week it shall undergo a bit of editing, also to deepen and darken out the imagery.. which I would love to be as rich and visually dark as possible, apocalypse is a dark subject, so to speak, at least visually it should be.... A little explanation of the premise:
the piece itself is about a female angel and her human love who becomes angry at God because of her distance, as she worries for the state of his soul, and thrashes against Heaven in his anger, causing a cataclysmic fall of stars and some apocalyptic things to stir.... The piece is inspired... I hope this lends clarity to a more mystical work... :)

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I kinda disagree that this needs to be edited or explained to such a degree in your author's notes. I believe your message is a universal one that can be read by many different people in very different ways. We all have our various apocalyptic experiences in life, so there's no need to define that or walk it back or anything. You've given the reader a relatable path to walk & it will look different for each of us who walk it. I love a poem that does that. Your sensations of doom & gloom are well done, not too gloomy, but just threatening enuf to show how life can be a little punishing at times!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

DAWWW.... Thanks ;) :) She / you are right.. I plan to leave it as is, until one day I decide it i.. read more
emipoemi

2 Years Ago

......in truth, let me be the third to disuade you. You don't need to edit this at all (regardless e.. read more
M. L. F.

2 Years Ago

Thank you.. :)



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Certainly very apocalyptic in tone and expression!

A rather different poem than i usually read from you; this one has multiple tones. What appeared to be a poem about the end of the world, took on biblical and mythological proportion and concluded with a sensual, loving image of an angel and his loved one embracing beneath these apocalyptic skies, hoping that their love may just halt the advance of the coming doom.

This is very much an idea i can see has been inspired by the apocalyptic works of Mr. S. King. And 2017 brings us The Dark Tower!!!

Another fine write, Misty. Full of wonderful images and well written as always.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you Doodley. I thought you might appreciate the tones of this piece, with your global / mysti.. read more
Nice work. You may not have used so much imagery, but you captured the feeling.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you... some rough edits left to do to enrich the piece, but yes.. Glad you enjoyed it..
Very nice, although I would have inserted more destructive imagery and avoided the Bible stuff. The Phoenix was a beautiful touch. Death and Rebirth, arising from its own ashes...
Great Title

I'm actually quite fond of Post-Apocalyptic fiction and video games.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

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M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Hell house... be mentally prepared brotha.. It is psychologically troubling... Good writer though.... read more
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3 Years Ago

Thanks for the link, Misty. I will let you know what i think. I hope there are no knives in this one.. read more
This one is is truly amazing Misty and I can relate to the depth of emotions in this writing. I love the imagery and guess what...strong soul forces are often bestowed with apocalyptic skies so they can shine forth into the darkness and illuminate the universe. Beautiful work.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Haha! NICE.... What was your combo? You don't have to tell here or at all just curious. I'm INFJ... read more
Diamond

3 Years Ago

It's the same...INFJ. :))))
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Niceee!! I thought something like mine... Supposedly we are the most rare of the 16 types... compri.. read more
How can anyone ask for more than this... Thank you DW,

-TheOneShePets

Posted 3 Years Ago


PhoenixDown

3 Years Ago

Lovely and misunderstood, but sure..
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

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I absolutely love all the Biblical references within this poem. And as always, your work is wonderfully visual; each line played before my eyes. And that ending wasn't what I was expecting. So intimate, with a great tie-in with the title.

Posted 3 Years Ago



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