Hope Deffered

     You know you love him, but that one love that could never be lingers silently in the depth of your heart.

     Your dream career is in the city, but you want to raise your children in that small town atmosphere that made your childhood and who you are today.

     You are about to graduate, so excited. Wide eyed at the world that is at your fingertips, yet terrified at the responsibility about to be placed on your shoulders.

You want to open your heart and share who you are, but the vulnerability that goes with the trust you would have to give petrifies you.

What if...

If only...

 Why can't....

If that was different...

     Life is a never ending path, as you walk along there are turns to make. And after each one there is another and another. You can't go back, only forward. Sometimes you stop and look back over your shoulder at passed gateways. Sometimes you strain to look ahead at the ones about to be arrived at. Man can only see the present. The Lord sees all.

      Hope deferred makes the heart sick: but when the desire comes, it is a tree of life. Proverbs 13:12. 

    

Reviews

[Annie]

I really like this! :) I like the different examples you've used, "You know you love him," "Your dream career," "About to graduate," e.t.c. You've made this really relevant to everyone. :) I especially like the bible verse you've chosen, Proverbs is quite a good chapter! The way you've ended it is very well too. "Man can only see the present. The Lord sees all." It really finishes the poem off, great write! :D

[Archia]

I really quite enjoyed this. I love how you say so much about the person in such short a space. "You want to open your heart and share who you are, but the vulnerability that goes with the trust that would petrifies you." I stuggled reading this line, I had to read it over and over and still it didn't make sense. It's the second half, the first is fine.
I liked how you ended with the verse, I do think it actually adds to this.

[Ryan Miller]

Coming from a small town, i really know what this is like... I enjoyed this!

[Wolfwind]

A lot of truth packed into to these words. The journey is indeed a forward motion that as much as we wish to keep the past frozen in time, we can't hold it there forever, less we ourselves don't evolve or grow. We do look back and wonder, we do look back and remember. But it's like you say, the Lord sees all and we are all on a path that he has set out for us, with our lessons to be learned.

I know the pull between small town and big city very well. I think I've battled with that for most of my adult life. In the end I've discovered that as long as I have faith, and pray for the Lord's insight, he will track me down the road I'm meant to drive on.

Great Thoughts!
Aaron

[A. L. Allen]

Wow, this is absolutely stunning. The message in this piece is brilliant, and I can totally relate to it. I love how you put the scripture at the end. Amazing job!