I Bleed V.2

I bleed when I think of you,

every day through and through.

 

I bleed when i hate myself,

on that day when you left yourself.

 

I bleed when I want you here so bad,

until the day when I will go very mad.

 

I bleed when I miss you,

because I forgot to kiss you.

 

I bleed again for the last time,

praying that you are still mine.

Reviews

[Viki Rachel]

It was a really great flow, and you didn't drawl for hours with complicating words and pointless meaning. I've noticed that quite a few people on here do that. But, yes, it was a spectacular poem.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is sad, but a good piece, i can relate

[Erica Daubert]

This is sad, but still beautiful. Short, and to the point. You didn't ramble on, most people tend to when writing poems like this or with similar messages. It was executed very well. Kudos

[Elrebmik™]

Very emotional piece, and sad, but I truly enjoyed it alot. Wonderful piece.

[cheeeeese]

Short, sad, and good. I like the repetitive 'I bleed', it adds emphasis. Great piece

[Sharkapillar]

Awh, this is so sad. I feel your pain, sweetheart. :/
Such a powerful poem, and striking imagery. Great job
~Blessed Be