Ravens

Ravens

A Poem by XxWhatsername86

This little boy can't understand what he wants.
His mind too crowded with too many thoughts
This little raven, can't make up his mind.
Denying the fact that he's a little too blind.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's risen above.
These ravens so mischievous.
There seems to be no end to this.

See, this little boy, oh raven of mine.
How I wish you saw that little girl shine.
Whenever you made your big debut.
But things are starting to look so new.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's grown up,
With these ravens so in love.
But to the little boy, this isn't enough.

This young gentleman so stuck in isolation.
Ever so sweet, ever so young, you're her creation.
She's so willing to fly away with you.
But you're so protective of her value.

This young lady with desires to be free,
With the young gentleman who cannot see.
The ravens becoming so much more.
But knows the consequences of gambling before.

© 2011 XxWhatsername86


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Love this!

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this. Its almost like a song, almost like its telling a wonderful story. Its so well written and flowing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's almost like lyrics. I like that there's also a chronological story within it that captivates the reader or at least me. Also how it's open to different perspectives. It flows nicely and the imagery really speaks to me. I really like it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Amazing poem great work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love it!! Nice job (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In the end we all take a gamble on love, dont we? very good poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love your rhymes and the simplicity of the poem. Beautiful !

Posted 9 Years Ago


attractive rhythm, it flowed so well..

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is brilliant! The rhyme is so perfect and i love the story that it creates in my mind.
Great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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"All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream." Edgar Allan Poe I'm 24 (July 12, 1994) and my name is Kim. I love taxidermy (I have a huge collection) and I'm a full time taxidermist. .. more..

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