Just a another day

Just a another day

A Poem by Blossom
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just a really short poem

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Wake up one morning
feeling the breeze
so calm,
so cool,
my head's in peace

the pills of the night before
are scattered all around me
I guess I kind of overdosed
I wonder why,
it didn't kill me

so many experiments
nothing seems to kill
I guess my will to die
is as strong as my will to live

its just another day,
I'll have to get by
need new ways to kill
so I don't start to regret

© 2010 Blossom


Author's Note

Blossom
what do think about the poem?
what should I add and take out?
appreciate the criticism...

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Awwww.....this is really sad. I feel this way sometimes...having to just get through the day and think about other ways to escape. Very well expressed depression.

Posted 9 Years Ago


this was a good poem lingering in the adolesant phase of most of our lives i think it flowed perfectly, poems dont have to rhyme but you could add a little more lenght

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ok it rhymed all the way through except the last stanza and that sort of took away from the poem for me because it flowed so well up to that point. Other than that I enjoyed this dark poem filled with desperation and sadness... j'adore

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is amazing! I love the whole poem! this has such a great feeling about it wonderful work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love it!
The pills of the night before
are scattered al around me
I guess I kind of overdosed
I wonder why,
it didn't kill me

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautiful! I love the soothing rhythm it has, it adds to the monotonous tone of the poem. (Monotonous because the person lived when they wanted to die and they can't do anything about it...) Great work!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on August 14, 2010
Last Updated on August 24, 2010
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Blossom
Blossom

Saskatoon, Saskatchewan, Canada



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Love to read and write enjoy almost everything love chocolate mostly write dark poetry but really I'm a really outgoing and hyper child. Weird... I know! Lets101 Quizzes - Online Quizzes Le.. more..

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