Red Umbrella

Red Umbrella

A Poem by Blossom

Red Umbrella's are left in the rain
crying softly for those that left them behind
they've been through it all
these matching umbrellas
belonging to a love
once so strong
these red umbrellas are left in the rain
while one cries out
'please stay'
the wind carries on
taking one with him
until one umbrella's left in the soaking rain
a love now
miles apart
these red umbrellas carry pain

© 2010 Blossom


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Colorful, dreary, and delicately touching. I liked the simplicity in meaning, the longing, and the repetition. Thanks for sharing.

-youoweyoupay

Posted 6 Years Ago


LOVED this.

I loved the umbrella metaphor, it has so many meanings. I especially loved the scenery here. I could see the many red umbrellas, vivid in color in the middle of nowhere while it's raining and there is wind. I just could envision it so clearly.

Then the "blowing away" of the other umbrella by the wind. I enjoyed this piece the most. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Awe its almost like a metaphor.Excellent job it was said and sweet of love way. What a great story to tell in such a poetic way. (punctuation)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Whoa, I'm speechless... I agree with storiestotell, the pain was felt! Beautiful!

Posted 8 Years Ago


i love it!! sorry it takes me ages to even look at read requests. This one was emotionally visual. red is a colour sprouting with feeling. great job!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


aw I liked it alot nicely done :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


I enjoyed that, good job

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautiful, The pain was felt, good expression!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Loved it!!! It was beautiful and interesting!! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


beautiful whispering surrealist composition~ much enjoyed the intricate brocade of this piece~

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Saskatoon, Saskatchewan, Canada



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Love to read and write enjoy almost everything love chocolate mostly write dark poetry but really I'm a really outgoing and hyper child. Weird... I know! Lets101 Quizzes - Online Quizzes Le.. more..

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