Novice

Daze 3/5

I used to be a gamer

Belong to an enormous community

Each one has different personality. 

At the safe of my home

Away from the outside world 

I never imagined. 

When the pandemic came,

It was like reality had slapped me in the face.

Priorities have changed 

As I step back, 

I told myself 

'How can these people managed to have fun in this situation?' 

Gaming had taken away what's more important in life

Exchanging the fleeting adrenaline rush 

With Time that it's meant to use wisely.

No one knows what will happen to life then, 

But now it is much more defined. 

Death is certain but it is more clearer now. 

With the technology we have, 

We are not that helpless anymore, 

We eventually can find a way. 

By devoting on what matters most in our lives. 

Observe, and find the initiative to do our part. 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love that you use yourself as an example, instead of coming off all preachy & telling people what to value in their lives & why. Your example is a good one, the way we take it for granted that we could've gotten together with someone, but instead, we stay in our cloistered existence in front of a screen. It felt like I had to read between the lines to come up with this point.

Your poem feels like you're not making your points as clearly or as powerfully as you could. The reader has to deduce, from your scattering of observations, that the death toll from covid is making this narrator more aware of his mortality. You kinda say it, but not as powerfully as you could. When you're writing about love or butterflies, it's okay to leave gaps & let the reader fill in the gaps. But the point you're making here is hugely significant & it needs to be hammered home more than being hinted at. It's a great point. People take people for granted, both in being physically accessible & also being & staying alive! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[YanZeros]

Hi Ms. Margie, thank you for all the words that you written here. 🙂 Take care, stay healthy and God bless you.