count down the days till i DIE!

count down the days till i DIE!

A Poem by I'm Just me:)
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I'm always on the run,

From your evil, heartless, friends,

 

I try to wear disguises

So you and your gang won't find me,

 

I have my calender marking the days,

That you have gotten to close,

But how many more days till i'm dead,

 

I dye my hair my hair black,

I get a new get a new wardrobe,

I try to hide in the black,

But like a breeze they blew right in,

My secret hiding place,

 

I can stop counting down,

because i have been caught,

But why me.....

 

Too late i am left here dead,

not able to finish my last words  

 

© 2012 I'm Just me:)


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absolutly lovely, good job (:

Posted 8 Years Ago


wow sad words but amazing write

Posted 9 Years Ago


Filled with sadness and riddled with deeper emotions than is clearly written. They feed each line with the inbetween underneathe unspoken whispers. Great Piece :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Roe
very sad write. really good this is :) great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a very sad poem written with very strong emotions, I can feel the desperation in your expression and am saddened by the fatalisic solution

Posted 9 Years Ago


it was short and had a very good sense of sadness and helplessness, great work, keep at it :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


That was pretty awome and really interesting,I hope this hassnt really happened. It sounds like theres just like evil and hatred working in the "characters" life (sorry diddnt know what to call that) it could be from the inside or outside but wherever it helps to think from another side of view, thanks for the write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is an intense piece, and i find it entertaining to read. Reminds me, a bit, of Dickinson's musings on death, and the first couplet brings me the idea of death in may forms as "evil, heartless, friends" My favorite line of the piece is the last "not able to finish my last words" One thing i might do for effect, if it were piece i was putting together, i might consider leaving the last two letters off "words", this way the last word would literally be unfinished> Just an idea, and if you don't like it, you know better than i do. either way, i appreciate the honor of reading your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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G!o
Heartfelt. I love the disguise of pain in your words...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wearing black won't keep you hidden. Best to be yourself and not have concern for other people opinions. In the end. We must like ourselves. A interesting poem that open the door to good questions. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago



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