dear parents!

dear parents!

A Poem by I'm Just me:)
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this shows how my siblings get royaly treated while i am stuck with a suck a*s slave life!!!

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dear parents

 

my dear brother fell in love

you let him go where ever he wanted with her

you spent what we had so they could be together

 

he is yet younger than i

 

i fall in love

you dont care

you spend money on him

not me

i need to see my love

you dont care

 

i see how you feel

you choose him over me

i am not special

i am just what you use

to get your house clean

to watch my siblings

 

but not any more

you want something

give something

 

love your slave of a daughter!

© 2012 I'm Just me:)


Author's Note

I'm Just me:)
tell me how this makes u feel i know a buncha shit is spelled wrong oh well just tell me wt u think

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I understand how you feel. I can relate, truly...My parents love my older brother cause he's a genius and they always underestimate me...yeah it feels bad, but sometimes I just try to ignore them and spend more time with friends...try that, it'll make you feel a lot better. Just try to stay away from home as much as you can :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


In terms of message? I think it's typical rage of a teenager against their parents.
You could've been a lot more creative with how you phrased it. Maybe gave it a more creative shell?

It could be a very humorous poem with some edits..
More colorful vocabulary as well?

Just returning a review.
Thanks.



Posted 8 Years Ago


i kno exactly how you feel gurl... the siblings get to do whatever they want.. but wen i wana do the same thing i get yelled at for asking.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


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wow lovely write

Posted 8 Years Ago


I can understand what you're feeling. I aways thought it was unfair the way guys are treated vs girls. I think that's why my sister became so rebellious. It's the way we are raised, can we change it? Should we change it?

Keep scribbling ms Jessica!!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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