Her Escape

Her Escape

A Poem by Viki Rachel
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A woman, who is alone and sad, paints to escape the small box of a house she knows she will never call home.

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The paintbrush has seen better days,

And she has too,

But the world is asleep,

And she's feeling quite blue.

 

So she picks up her paintbrush and dips it in green,

And proceeds to paint landscapes that her eyes have never seen.

 

A beach, with white sands,

Like the color of her face,

The sea,

So full of fierceness and grace.

 

A desert, with a bird,

That flies as high as a kite,

And it never looks down,

Because its fear is not height.

 

Then a small cottage,

In a field so green,

And the love in that field,

Is something she's never felt,

Or seen.

 

Now the painting is done,

To many, it makes no sense,

But to all of those people,

This girl is not dense.

 

In her box of a house,

With one friend,

Just a mouse,

She's isolated and alone,

And she still is not at home.

© 2010 Viki Rachel


Author's Note

Viki Rachel
This poem, in case you didn't catch it, is about a woman who's never been loved, and she's always been alone, so she paints to escape all of that sadness and desperation.

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I love the visuals that this poem brings up with the painting. It's quite breath taking and lovely. It's wrinkled with sadness of a woman so lonely but at least she has all of her imagination to keep her company. This is a great rhyme and I love rhyming poems most of all. Great write. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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i like the senitment of this poem very much, it divides very vivid picutres in my mind. I do feel however the the rhyming takes away from the message, think it would move better in a less rigid structure. Reading the comments below i realise I may be alone in this! Still a very solid write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Clever sense of desperation and isolation encaptulated with the use of art

Posted 9 Years Ago


wonderfully penned imagery and visuals allowing the reader to see within their mind what you are attempting to convey. you pulled it off nicely. great write.

~anna rose

Posted 9 Years Ago


I liked the hiccup..here..'Then a small cottage,

In a field so green,

And the love in that field,

Is something she's never felt,

Or seen.'



Posted 9 Years Ago


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this is written so incredibly well. descriptive, great flow and emmotions. you captured the sadness and brought it to the reader. excellent piece!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


lovely images here. u are a good poet.

Posted 9 Years Ago


To many, it makes no sense,
I think the to should have been too, but that was the only mistake I caught.

I really liked the beginning the most, I felt it was more vivid and I could really feel what was happening. The end was good too, though, but not as good?

I liked your writing style, though, and my favorite poems are the ones that rhyme.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like how you use language to portray an ideolised picture of the natural world that your subject paints, contrasting that with the 'real' world that is her life. I enjoyed it very much.

Posted 9 Years Ago


exceedingly beautiful. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


a girl who's not loved? sounds like u

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Viki Rachel
Viki Rachel

Dallas, TX



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