Nothing Cold

Nothing Cold

A Poem by Zakari Schmidt
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Not broken, tired, flesh or bone

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Maybe I could someday find
a destination far from sight
Something I could call my own
not broken, tired, flesh or bone
So I don't look for any one of you
I leave myself with nothing much to do

Maybe if I shut my eyes
and felt closer to whats inside
I'd see you in another way
than a tear,
falling down my face

Standing here until
you touch the floor
or find a way back in through
open, pleading pores,
like part of me was not there
anymore

I don't need you here
to grieve over the shame
of knowing that I let
My light, with our love
fade away

If you should return
upon struggles in your beliefs,
Don't let the fire go out
when alone with your
darkest dreams
If my fingers were candles
and your open mouth in flames,
I would reach so far inside
nothing cold would remain

© 2015 Zakari Schmidt


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You've done it again! You always deliver something fresh and new, that I probably would've never imagined.
You have an ability to pinpoint feelings that many people may not wanna recognize and present them with such sagacity and vivid images.
Great job!

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Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

I always look forward to your reviews, thank you frontier! Your kind words mean a lot to me :D



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I love the flow and the rhyme - not forced at all, a soft dance across the page. I think this would be lovely set to music. I would love to hear it. Great work Zachary. You really have an amazing talent!

:) Julie

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Posted 9 Years Ago


The rhythm that you use sews the whole piece together. I really love your imagery here, and the comparisons you made!! This one has such a rich musical quality to it. You write so eloquently but your tone is always so gentle and rhythmic. Overall it seems really fresh and light, but manages to make a huge impact. My favourite lines would be
"open, pleading pores, 
like part of me was not there 
anymore "
and
"If my fingers were candles 
and your open mouth 
in flames, 
I would reach so far inside 
nothing cold would remain"

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much :) I really appreciate the depth of your review and I'm so glad you took the time .. read more
This is intense and your imagination is amazing!
You expressed the pain really nicely.
I could feel all the pain and longing along with your words.
" Maybe if I shut my eyes
and felt closer to whats inside
I'd see you in another way
than a tear,
falling down my face"
I loved these lines a lot!
You are indeed a writer :)

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Hey thank you for taking the time to read and review, I'm glad something I wrote might have stuck wi.. read more
Umm.... WOW! I think this is the first piece of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading, and my gosh I am so glad I did! There was so much intensity woven into your words! That put together with an unusual but brilliant rhythm and rhyme scheme and you had me hooked. I think the last stanza has got to be my favorite, though the whole poem leading up to it was what made it so impacting. Brilliant piece of artwork my friend!

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Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful review, I'm glad you liked it. I think that's awesome coming from such a.. read more
You've done it again! You always deliver something fresh and new, that I probably would've never imagined.
You have an ability to pinpoint feelings that many people may not wanna recognize and present them with such sagacity and vivid images.
Great job!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

I always look forward to your reviews, thank you frontier! Your kind words mean a lot to me :D
That is absolutely gorgeous poetry.
Very emotional piece.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Thank you Ana, I'm always glad when you read my poetry!
Wow this has great imagery! The contradiction between independence and the need for someone else is really strong, sometime you need them sometimes you don't. I think that is a powerful skill considering how some people easily fall into needing something/someone all the time.
Great write :)

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and review amber! I appreciate your kind words...such a skill .. read more
Amber Lily

9 Years Ago

Don't worry I think was all fall to one side more than the other at times, it's often just more fun .. read more
Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Feelings mutual! :)
i am really impressed with the imagery and abstract feel to this...

i didn't keep your candle lit, but on your own try to keep the flame alive....

if i could retrace my steps, i would never have let you fade away...

the second chance, the reaching in as far as we could...this reminds me of Robert Creeley...

excellent piece.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you sir, what a great review. I am so glad my choices of imagery stuck with and resonated .. read more
In my library...:).................

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Thanks Sami much appreciated!! I'll look forward to reading more of your work, thanks again
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

:)............................
Some very good lines to quote. A wonderful write...:).....................

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Zakari Schmidt

9 Years Ago

Hey thank you for taking the time to read and review, I appreciate it!
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

Hey. You are welcome...:).............

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Added on November 7, 2014
Last Updated on September 17, 2015
Tags: Poetry, life, romance, dark

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Zakari Schmidt
Zakari Schmidt

KC, MO



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I've been writing creatively/semi-seriously for around a decade. 24 isn't old. Right now I'm writing folk songs, these poems/lyrics are part of my ASCENSION/ATTENTION collection. It's about being an a.. more..

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