A Poem by Zack Burton

Poem #28. Uploaded Tuesday November 23, 9:39 PM.

Shake your legs
Destroy the base
Remove the pegs
This is how
The tower falls
The motor breaks
The engine stalls
This is when
Your courage fails
Your will corrodes
Your soul derails
Remove all doubt
Your mind is gone
You're dead, you're out
This is why
You're called a w***e
You're pushed around
You're brave no more
This is what
You've come to now
You've waited long
You've bent the plow
And now the harvest
Is surely gone
You gambled once
And now you're done
Crack your bones
From high above
I hear your groans

© 2010 Zack Burton

Author's Note

Zack Burton
It felt like a stroke of brilliance. What do you think?

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well honed verbal edge striking open another reality view with every single line~

Posted 12 Years Ago

It was nice. I probably wouldn't rhyme any of the lines, if it was me.

Posted 12 Years Ago

It felt like a rollercoaster ride, an incantation, a song, and a whirlwind of rhyme all in time, and i loved it

Posted 12 Years Ago

A stroke of brilliance, indeed. Each line was like a whipping slash of a knife. Very succinct and precise in its execution. Bravo, my dear. Bravo.

Posted 12 Years Ago

It feels inspired. Assessment of a fallen friend fitting a deserving end.
"And now the harvest
Is surely gone
You gambled once
And now you're done"

Posted 12 Years Ago

damn good poem. I enjoyed it.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on November 24, 2010
Last Updated on November 24, 2010
Tags: burton, failure, revenge, imagery, destruction, expressionist


Zack Burton
Zack Burton

Felicity, OH

Zack Burton. 17. Art fanatic, book fanatic, tennis fanatic. Inspirations: Joseph Heller, William Faulkner, Virginia Woolf, Emily Dickinson. Oh, and Michael Smerconish of The Big Talker 1580. .. more..


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