Dramatica

"This poem truly gave me a feeling of nostalgia." - NiceGuysLoveBetter

I feel a sense of urgency.
An honest mess of distress,
But I swear to whatever divine being:
I would take a bullet in my chest,
To feel something other than this angst but I can't,
Overcome this contrivance.
So don't make plans,
Because this man might be a scam.
Don't we all know this was just a big misunderstanding?

I followed you home,
Ended up broke,
And choked in your courtyard baby.
The things that I saw you do...
I bid adieu Ms. Fourth Street Avenue.
The nights we walked...
Goodbye again you scarab in my skin.

The flowers last petiole, plunges to it's death.
The coward twitches violently,
As his heart begins its process,
Because this man is dying,
There will be no mercy.
Those children should be living,
Not graveyard kids at best,

An aching pain in their mother's chest.

Author's Note

I bid adieu Ms. Fourth Street Avenue.

Reviews

[Hello, Goodbye]

I respect the honesty in this poetic expression. The feeling and emotion behind it is commendable. I would hope for a bit more pushing of the inner turmoil.. but it may be something Im looking for and not necessarily what you strove to do.. regardless its a great write.

[MichaelsLyric.com]

Nice flow, unique imagery. I enjoyed the read. Thank you.

[Robert]

i love this style, very similar to the bands on your playlist (mainly say anything, huge fan btw) i found your poem to not be the dated annyoning style that fills this genera of poetry, and for that i thank you. i would have liked to see a little my rhymeing and word play but the little bit you do have works for the poem and gives it its character. very interesting veiw on the subject as well, and the way it was handled.

[Ruth]

This is outstanding hon!
A great poem that truly hits hard with emotion1 In a unique manner, quite a philosophical piece too love, a GREAT piece of work!
xx

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Zack,

Your first stanza doesn't seem to move with the rest of the poem, I think if you took out the line "Overcome this contrivance" the stanza seems to flow better. Quickens the pace if you will. Also misspelled because. Just suggestions. And so you wouldn't take me wrong I changed my normal format for reviewing. I don't want you to think I am attacking you.

The Dramatica indeed, but I think I would be more interested in Ms. Fourth Street Abenue. She would be a delicate delight served on a silver plater. Do You think she bites? I hope she does.

Always,

Matthew