So slow.

Just a state of mind.

The breeze is on my face.

Its late at night.

I hear crickets.

Cheep cheep.

 

Most of my family are asleep.

I see the stars.

They are very high.

Shimmer and shine.

 

Should I go to bed?

I smell new lawn grass.

So fresh and new.

Intake of fresh air.

 

I feel so serene

so peaceful

but

rather

tired.

 

Reviews

[r]

I love this. It's peaceful and very pretty. Nice work, Faye.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

I like this poem. Nice work

[lawrence bear]

nice... slowly drifting off to sleep. I like this

[Prateeksha Khot]

different. nice work

[Dupree]

Sorry hun this is pretty goood but i just don't like it.

[Kenneth W. Barber]

I find this interesting as it seems to capture not so much a moment in time as the way you felt during that moment. On a grammatical note, the use of it's in the second line is contractual and so requires an apostrophe. Overall, good job. I enjoyed it.