All hail, troubadours, minstrels and bards... not to forget the jesters that each occupy equal space and for a transient moment equal footing when bridges of sapient and affective connections are forged.
I like your theme. And the poet accesses the highest places with words that can erase caste and title to bring everyone to one. And probably feast pretty well too!
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Hi, thanks so much for that poetic feedback, yeah one as poets.
I love your use of sophisticated vocabulary with rhyming . . . well crafted. I'm interested in the worlds you describe, which feel somewhat antique & foreign to me, since royalty is not part of the USA experience. But despite a throwback to older times, your message is current & applicable to today's world too (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Warm thanxx for such a great review. Im glad u could relate the archaic to the modern.
Take.. read moreWarm thanxx for such a great review. Im glad u could relate the archaic to the modern.
Take care!
dear Zaynab... being a troubadour of poetry is indeed a high calling... and brings so much comfort to the heart and soul throughout the world or kingdoms... truly a delightful read. As ever, Pat
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
It sure does sometimes at least. Warmest thanks for great fine words contributing to this poem. Happ.. read moreIt sure does sometimes at least. Warmest thanks for great fine words contributing to this poem. Happy new yr!
"For I'd rather be a poetess for kings
so to my tunes swayed a kingdom
than I be the king of mere subjects
and be filled with regal boredom!
So I could join ranks of
troubadours
and sing for the king
some folklores."
First of all, I loved the title of the poem 'The Royals vs The Poet's Realms'. Your poem depicts your internal feelings about poetry and it's world. You can just reject all the materialistic elements for poems. Well penned!
Well written Zaynab. I really enjoyed the rich language and composition in this poem which talks of values and those who have all the wealth and those who have nothing. That's the world of the past, the world of today and without doubt the world of the future. Nothing changes. So good to meet you on here.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Oh pal sory couldn't come earlier, busy life ah. Yes it's great to meet u here dear. I enjoyed your .. read moreOh pal sory couldn't come earlier, busy life ah. Yes it's great to meet u here dear. I enjoyed your fine thoughts on this poem too.
"The Royals vs the poet's realm"
S.zaynab Kamoonpury,
Lovely phrasing which lends itself to the theme of those in posh surroundings and those working hard but happy in there craft of creation. I felt that this even told a story of not becoming out of touch with certain groups of humanity. Our earth is such a wide swath of 'everyone.' I am sure it is true where you are from as well maybe even more so. I appreciated your rhythmic almost sing-song lyrical poem.
Blessings and nice to meet you,
kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
And I like how u summed and added to it. Such diversity on this planet yeahhh. Everywhere there's ro.. read moreAnd I like how u summed and added to it. Such diversity on this planet yeahhh. Everywhere there's royalty and poverty methinks too. Warm thanx.
So am I yer friend now?
6 Years Ago
Yes, and It looks like you have ten people in your friends box.You will not let me forget. That's p.. read moreYes, and It looks like you have ten people in your friends box.You will not let me forget. That's probably good. Maybe i'll learn something I hope. Nice to talk to you. Have fun!
Kathu
Ah, Dear Zaynab,
I would like to extend a warm and joyous welcome to the Writers' Café. Sincerely, I wish for you to like it here and stay with us, to make fine friends and attract many fans, and to learn much about our craft from some wonderfully gifted poetesses, poets, and author/writers.
In this, your first offering, you've blessed us with an original variety of unmetered poetic genre, spot-on and near rhymes, and with metaphoric syntax, gifted us a great message of life's true values and treasures, where they are most likely to be found, and where they are not.
In America, if one works hard, becomes skilled enough, publicizes and promotes their poetic compositions correctly, they may be both rich and a successfully happy poetess or poet, knowing the best of both worlds at the same time, but even as an American, your wise and valuably valid message is not lost on me; for, if a choice I must make, a happy, poor, free-spirited poet I would choose a thousand times over royalty and riches.
As a long-tenured teacher of poetry, poetically-speaking in critique of this piece, a closer meter between lines would make it read more smoothly and enjoyably for more readers, with a more consistent rhyme-scheme, and having said all that, none of it would make your message any clearer to me … all of it would only improve your poetical skills, allowing this to be the original, virtual masterpiece I think it deserves to be.
If you find value in my words, I will always be thrilled to offer my hand at anytime, about anything poetical you might wish of me.
Again, "Welcome, Zaynab!" : )
I love both the spirit of this beautiful piece from your heart and mind, and most assuredly, the invaluable message … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🌸
(PS: Don't worry, all my reviews won't be a book … LOL!)
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thanx so much for your great constructive criticism, I like the longer the better, I like the human .. read moreThanx so much for your great constructive criticism, I like the longer the better, I like the human interaction, instead of writing without commentary which could be aki to arrogant monologue. English is my second language so I can't be perfect in meter as I let my rhythm and meter follow my muse then I've to say whatever I say without focus on perfect conventional poetry. Yet I will try to improve in whatever way I understand and what I can.
U described my poetry in new terms which just enlightens me.
Yeah I even know easterners who make a living by poetry but it's great to know Americans can afford royal palatial life due to poetry solely if that's what u mean.
So I welcome you to future such reviews and Pleez do it for my newest poem too. Cheers.
all the money and luxuries in the world could not sway me from writing...it is my breath. I relate to this muchly...the kings and queens worry...we sing with words...I like the use of slant rhyme in this piece.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thanx soo much for supporting and favouring poets and poetry rather than royalty like a few naughty.. read moreThanx soo much for supporting and favouring poets and poetry rather than royalty like a few naughty ones did. I'm sure they were of those tired of hard times eh lol but I wish for no royalty in this world. Next world ok time for luxury lol.
I like to call myself a poetess even though I'm no professional or conventional at writing poetry.
Have been writing poems for some time and readers say they get message and/or entertainment from the.. more..