To be alive

To be alive

A Poem by S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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To be alive isn't just to be alive and kicking
feeling your own legs and limbs.
To be alive is to
percieve the sights and sounds
that those who have kicked the bucket can't appreciate
until resurrection and the long wait for heaven's gate

God's most precious gift to us
Is life which He breathed into our souls.

But to be alive is to thaw
the frozen cold heart
with the warmth of feeling
coz we aren't born coldblooded.

Alive is
the sense of hearing
that hearkens not just the artificial violin
but the natural songbird's birdsong.
To see not just the obvious, the apparent
but as well to see with the eyes of wisdom.
To not just gaze at silver screens and the telly all day
But rather to gaze and observe all of nature's scenery and sights around you,
Let us not be the living dead....

To feel not just your own skin,
to not spend life touching cellphones
but rather employ the sense of touch
to feel petals and other critters.
To be alive isn't to smell your own breath and sweat
but to inhale all the distinct fragrances of nature.
And to taste not merely of the artificial flavors
of fizzy pale poison refined sugar's sodas
but to cup your hands to taste the raindrop!

Do I in anyway imply by this that those born blind, deaf or dumb are less alive?
Never! For I've seen the blind appreciate divinely created nature far more than the seeing.
For to the blind every sound is precious,
for every voice they are grateful.
And every touch has meaning...
For a missing and lacking sense or organ is compensated by the activation of the other senses or organs.
I had a domestic helper who was deaf
yet so smart and more eagle-eyed, keen and alert about happenings around her

Be alive with all your God given senses
Don't wait to be deprived of even one,
to appreciate them.
For senses like limbs, freeze and can get impaired
when they're not in usage.
God created this world for our toil and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven.

The spirit of poetry guides my inking I feel
it tells me what to jot down from m my myriad thoughts

© 2019 S.zaynab.kamoonpury


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I like the quotes. Saw you on the home-page. Well liked this so much.😀 Simply I'd say it's like finding hope in darkness... Umm alliteration in an unrhymed poem (just example) This is a different one from alliteration... Great Write hope you'd like to see my page as well.😉
Good Luck!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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2 Years Ago

There's someone else here to be the reason. Focus on you critique... :) you'll do great.
S.zaynab.kamoonpury

2 Years Ago

Sorry I don't get u. What reason and what someone else? Warmest thanxx for your fine comment on my p.. read more
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2 Years Ago

nevermind. :) You're doing really well.



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Truisms and stoicisms... valid and to be valued thoughts. But be wary of "telling" it often comes across as talking down to another than talking with an other.

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

I get you sir, maybe I should change ' yous ' more to we, coz I certainly need to remind myself of t.. read more
Chris

3 Years Ago

"We's" might work better - would have to listen to the new tones of your words. And yet having a wo.. read more
I am not really a fan of these sorts of philosophy-lite styles of writing. Quite often all that is written is basic common sense and oft repeated words and themes.

Your message here is strong; to engage with life with all our senses before we lose them and succumb to our end. It's true that when one loses a sense the others compensate for its loss and become sharper than the norm. So we should always embrace life and all it has to offer.

Some of your language reads a little blunt; "those who have kicked the bucket can appreciate...", it could use a little more finesse and as a whole the piece should resist straying too far from your initial idea. A write becomes a laborious read when one goes off on different tangents of thought. Just something to consider for next time.

Overall, a nice moral contained within.

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Hmm I always thought philosophy and common sense are very different and paradoxical together so I'm.. read more
Doodley

3 Years Ago

The term i used was, "philosophy-lite", meaning written in that style of thought but without the dee.. read more
S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Oh ok will check that out, that's a new word for me. And I feel what I wrote is not common sense sin.. read more
This is truly beautiful so true and descriptive

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

I'm glad you think so. Warm thanks for comment. Take care.
Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

1 Year Ago

Just read this
If one is having an off day
Reading it helps to
Make positive.. read more
'To be alive'
S zaynab kamoonpury,
This was a halpful and and affirming tribute to the gift of life! We who live and walk this planet know this. We know the beauty of life. Troubles get in the way for many and it is something disturbing but I have to hope for the good of humanity. Lovely writing.
Kathy

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Warm thanks for your comment, I like your outlook on life despite it's troubles. Take care.
Some things people take for granted truly need to be appreciated. We only have this life to truly live. Given such, time is a precious commodity, we must share in it in a way that is meaningful, or we will have no higher purpose, no reason to be here, unless we make one ourselves.

The poem was from a place of knowledge, it seems you truly love life. I wish that people like you were the ones teaching our children. Rather than those who wish to be knowledgeable, to wish to live is crucial to life. Without knowing life, how can you know anything? Living is learning.

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much for adding to this and reaffirming the value of life. There's an afterlife I believe .. read more
Great poetry and imagery, we should all be in touch the wonders of Nature,

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

And wow, I like how you put it, yes we should stay in touch with nature. Thanks so much for great co.. read more
A very lengthy poem, and a religious one. I agree with the ideas expressed, and I like the use of words that convey vivid images in the reader's mind. There is also a use of similes for example in the last stanza where the senses are likened to limbs. I enjoyed this poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your comment, well this isn't as religious a poem as my others, it's more on appreciating.. read more
There is so much wisdom and perception contained in your writing. I too agree that in no matter what shape or form it comes we must appreciate all the God has given us.

Take care - Dave

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Thanks soo much for a great noble comment! Best wishes,
there are so many forms of life and so many life forms...
God allows us to breathe for a time, and it is up to us to take advantage of that time by giving to others and by appreciating all that is around us.
it goes fast...and as i am aging i feel it going even faster...the senses need to be used or they definitely will freeze....this poem is a plea to live to the fullest...
and to let others live as they will, as well.
nicely done,
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Yes you got it well and added your summing so nicely, thanks so much for your thoughts on this!
Beautifully written spiritual thoughts. Yes, we must appreciate all that we have every day. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


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S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Years Ago

Warm thanks for your nice lovely review of this poem Lydia. There was a typo so I retyped it.

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