The rise and fall of life's notes

The rise and fall of life's notes

A Poem by S.zaynab.kamoonpury

Didactic poetic

Take life for an escalator
Go both through its ups
and downs
Ride it like on an elevator
Expect both smiles and

Take life for a suspense
you and I unaware what
the next day will hold
Meditate and muse, or
this book of life just
Pore over it to watch
life's mysteries unfold.

Take life for the open sea
But pray drown not
yourself in it
lest you lose sight of
God's shore
and thereby lose all
spiritual wit.

Take life for a candle
let its glow illumine
others too
and in each and every of
its flicker
Try finding a hint or clue

Each soul's life unique as
mazes of one's
And usually for many
life's quite an uphill battle
At times sweet as
molasses, at times bitter
as mint
and life's roller coaster
may shake you like a rattle.

Life tis like the rise and
fall of musical notes
Consoling to find people
in the same boats
Up and down, like on a violin
Sometimes you lose,
sometime you win
We are better off
if we commit less sin

Thus ponder over your
life and reflect
how good you've been
to it
and not just how it's
been treating you
Veer around the pit, and
keep your path lit
for darkness of the soul
is for you unfit.

Take it in its stride even if it's a bittersweet life
Downhill's a joy ride, uphill has to be strife

© 2020 S.zaynab.kamoonpury

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I agree my friend.
"Take it in its stride even if it's a bittersweet life
Downhill's a joy ride, uphill has to be strife"
Life is a mix of ups and downs. We need to have more good days than bad. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.

Posted 1 Year Ago

A wonderful expression on life. Enjoyed well

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch!
Nice flow. The words have a rhythm that makes it all feel very free, but wisdom still
exists between the lines.

Posted 2 Years Ago

Your poem has a nice spirit and a nice message. You have a nice touch with meter and rhyme. My one criticism is that you sometimes invert natural word order to achieve end rhyme. I think it's better to find more natural wording. For example:

But pray drown not yourself in it

But please don't drown yourself in it!

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 Years Ago

Ah yeah I like to use classic archaic English and
language terms, so they used to write like,.. read more
Michael R. Burch

2 Years Ago

To each his own, I suppose.
Life is a roller coaster
with various twists and
turns that's for sure
suppose we just have
to do the best we can
and make each moment
count until we complete
life's journey down its many
avenues o f adventure;

nice w ork

Posted 2 Years Ago

This is such a wonderful tenet to live by S. "Take life for a candle..let its glow illumine"- and your comparisons/similes to life in each verse are so on -point and filled with inspiration. Light in spirit and graceful in word. Thank you!

Posted 2 Years Ago

This poem held me to the end. Wonderfully explained and expressed! Different in a good way. Creative. tyfs

Posted 3 Years Ago


3 Years Ago

Thanks, sorry for the curt reply, real tired typing today.
This is my second poem of yours that I read and each time I could feel myself relaxing into the ease of your words. Life does take us up and down and taking it is stride is beneficial. Your words are wise and profound.

Posted 3 Years Ago

A fun, uplifting poem.
Great rhythm and flow

Posted 3 Years Ago

Some very nice reflections penned in here Zaynab:) it’s nice to keep your mind grounded in times like these. Maintaining a sense of presence is key to getting through the hard times

Posted 3 Years Ago

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Added on July 18, 2020
Last Updated on July 19, 2020
Tags: Life, spiritual



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