Shadows of you

Shadows of you

A Poem by Patience

Small song, felt like writing it.

Song name:Drawing demons

Taking up my pencil,
Putting the tip to the paper,
The shadows jumping to to my heartbeat,
The picture coming together in my mind,

Your words like lines,
Bringing everything together,
The shadows controling my every move,
Like torture the piercing pain of love,

The way the pencil moves,
Like your body covered in my shadows,

© 2010 Patience

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Author's Note

my first lyrics :P

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The way the pencil moves,//Like your body covered in my shadows

It's definitely something striking--I wonder at the melody that one would attach to it.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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I like these alot,and the comparison between the movement of the pencil and shadows,to me, was particularly striking. Good lyrics!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Nicely done. It flows well, and has a good taste for slight imagery. You did a good job, for your first lyrics.

Posted 9 Years Ago

I like this.
It has a nice edge to it.
This is really good for your first lyrics.
Keep it up!
-Elissa :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

They may be your first but they are good. It flows really well. I have tried writing lyrics and I only got a few lines. You definetly did a great job on this one

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on February 20, 2010
Last Updated on February 20, 2010



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