A Lover's Warning

She was on the edge of insanity,

with no way to escape.

Then blood, power, pain;

perfect and inseparable;

on the edge of life--

then death;

Glorious, yet unseen.

No telling what lay beneath--

falling and falling

faster and faster

until only light separated them.

She was beyond cold--

vanquished by the hate,

blood dripping; no pouring--

Her hands slick,

but the night had only begun.

Screaming, crying, terrifying rage--

Yet his heart…

slower and slower

Less steady, then nothing.

Her head down,

and he was gone.

Meticulous and malicious

Out of thought, out of mind

eyes open, cautiously aware

sweet venom--

oh, so sweet the taste.

Now slowly mending was she;

Vengeance of a woman scorned.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Wow! A very intense piece! I thought that the wording of this piece was absolutely beautiful, and had a really unique style to it. I liked the repetition of the words, and your use of punctuation. I loved the lines "Meticulous and malicious/Out of thought, out of mind"; they were just worded perfectly, and really reflected the tone of the piece. The ending left me speechless! Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Marie Harrison]

Very interesting tale. I like the description of her in this poem. Very unique poem that I enjoyed! Great job!