Luna

Luna

Friday, March 13, 2020

10:29 AM

She was like the moon,

a part of her always remained hidden,

always remained undiscovered.

Author's Note

just a small fragment :)

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A little poem that paints a bigger picture. I saw a shy, demure and beautiful woman here with an air of mystery about her. There's alot more to be said. The moon makes a great metaphor.

Chris

[Alison Barker]

I really like this poem!!
I wondered if it could be improved by removing the first 'always'.
Hope that is helpful.
Cheers,
Alison.

[.]

Except when she is full and bloating with light. Then she reveals her secrets. Nice lines. :)

[AC Sipe]

I love the concept. It's easy to visualize and know exactly what you mean.