Nightmares

When anxiety hits and you need a saviour.

My nights are plagued by nightmares.

My days are full of dreams.

My friends consume my laughter,

But they ignore my screams.

My room is filled with shadows.

My brain stuck in the past.

If change is going to happen,

Then it should happen fast.

My mind’s obsessed with failure.

My doubts don’t seem to hush.

So if you want to save me,

I think you better rush.

My sleep is drowned in terror,

My thoughts are drenched in fright

So if you think of coming,

Then you should come tonight.

Reviews

[DreamCatcher08]

The first stanza absolutely drew me in with its own self destruction. and it only continues from there. I love this.

[Robert Trakofler]

Delicious flow wonderful rhyme lovely cadence and endearing feeling not one thing I don’t like about this poem. I have had those nights many times in the past I too have written about them. I am lucky I rarely have those nights of terror anymore! I hate to speak of the mechanics for the words speak so strongly of panic attacks. but I have to say that the sing song happy tonality of the poem gives an excellent contrast to the subject to a very macabre feel! I can speak volumes on how I slowly overcame these horrible nights but for the sake of brevity I will just offer you a most sincere bunny hug:)

[@_av_poetry]

Wow much appreciated. It means a lot. I could also go on for ages but I'll let the poems do the speaking. This form of expression is a sort of therapy for me anyway. Thanks for reading :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

dreams of feeling normal, of being happy, days that we just sleepwalk through life. we find that unfortunately many friends are there for the good times, not the bad. They are more than willing to laugh with us, but when the pain visits, they politely excuse themselves.
And we need something or someone to keep us fighting...yes, a saviour of sorts.
Quite the intense read, av...you write from the heart...and it is refreshing. There is power even when form takes a bit of a hit.
j.

[@_av_poetry]

Hey J. Thanks for reading. Could you please elaborate on where you think the form takes a hit? I would love to work on it and improve.

[emipoemi]

This is what I'm talking about when I say musicality!! This is fantastic!! The expression is "drowned IN" (not "with") and I would suggest a disyllabic synonym of "dread" (like "horror" or "terror") so there's consistency in the lines (but that I'll leave up to you). This is otherwise beyond words! Your best yet in terms of construction and execution. Well freaking done!

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you. You always take the time to read my work and give advice and I'm really grateful.

[emipoemi]

it's always a pleasure.

[@_av_poetry]

Good point as well. I am completely oblivious of this little flaws sometimes.

[emipoemi]

you'll get better at catching those in time :)