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‘Sok you tell me  kindly

patting my arm as I drop a

dish towel on the coffee stain rapidly

spreading across the cream carpet,

same place as where you pissed

the other day

so it’s ok. You understand

my hand was shaking

he slammed the door so hard

eyes burning-

 
you get distracted and bark in excitement

and greeting as the cat scoots past, wearily

 crunching her biscuits with

one eye on your beaming face

quick little nappy bum darts across

hand outstretched

 for her tail but I’m up

 and you cackle madly

 as I swing you off the floor

and we pad from room to room,

 your special smile spread across my face 

Reviews

[caesarkreshen]

like this, too. Eerie feeling.

[Elaenor Aisling]

Very sweet. Lovely work.

[Laura Maidah]

Never mind. This is very different from your other poems. It's quite good. Ignore that last crit. Thanks for a great read. I don't like "special smile" because it sounds generic, but all in all, nice!

[Wondering Mind]

the instictive mother's heart in every lady (almost) never fails to amaze and humble me

[Pretty Faces Split Open]

such sweetness and tenderness here, so beautiful

[Dan Morton]

I especially like the last line, very nice word-play.

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. ah ... i did think it was mr. nappy bum ... :) ...

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[Brad]

if it weren't for my dog daisy, i would have made some fatal mistakes...she's saved me more than i like to admit. the voice here is so casual, as if having a cuppa with a friend

[John Stussy]

I could be wrong but it seems to be about a puppy, the consolation and companionship and all-out fun it provides. I miss having a dog, and now I miss it even more, your lovely little poem here showed them at their everyday best.