Sinister Sickly Sweet

This is a poem I wrote quite a while ago. Its free verse and still pretty rough. Please leave feedback! I love really indepth comments about what you liked/didn't like so feel free!

 

I imagine I’ll be syrup, golden and glistening,

impossibly sticky like a spiders wound web.

Like butter wouldn’t bubble, then melt.

I’ll be sickly sweet and tempting,

you’ll be unable to resist.

I will slowly feast and creep to rot

your porcelain teeth, down to their root.

 

Or maybe I’ll be a cigarette,

my smoke will slither, cling like fungus

to your fingers, clothes, hair…lips.

I’ll inject deadly, thick tar into

soft tissue, your pink lungs.

I’ll encourage germs to fester,

to evolve, to multiply into lethal cells.

 

Or perhaps I’ll be lumps of fat,

I’ll slide sluggishly down your throat,

you’ll struggle to digest me in toxic acid.

I’ll clog your arteries, over flowing.

I’ll spark a fire, pain and fatigue in

your muscles, your heart.

 

Or perchance I’ll be alcohol.

I’ll be whiskey, a spirit.

I’ll need to be thrown down

your throat quickly, as I burn.

I will batter your fragile liver,

impair your judgement,

rob your senses, your vital signs.

I’ll make you bruised, bloody, blind,

deaf, dumb, dead.

 

But I imagine I won’t do any of these after all.

I am stronger, superior to you, proud and bright.

Maybe I will be avenged with

success and happiness instead.

Perhaps I will simply walk away

from you, the wretch, smirking.

Perchance I’ll pity you as I live, succeed, prosper,

while you slowly, agonisingly fill with

regret, sugar, fat, smoke, disease, alcohol

and emptiness.

Reviews

[The Twin Arenas]

heh. sounds gross.

the last four lines made me feel unhealthy.

most of us will pick syrup, smokes, fat, and drinks.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Powerful and self-assured...:)..................

[Sophie McN]

aww thank you :D

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).....................

[Meraki]

Whoa revenge in the simplest of forms can cause the greatest damage wicked. But then the best revenge there is, is to be the best you can be. That's awesome! :D

[Sophie McN]

exactly :D haha thank you!!