lonelines

lonelines

A Poem by aaron
"

just something i thought of, and how it relates to me

"

Sometimes I feel as the moon.

Surround buy stars.

Yet,

Those stars in reality.

Are so far away.

 

Loneliness.

 

 

 

 

 

© 2015 aaron


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aaron
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1:There are tons of spelling errors...I think you've broken a record for the most mistakes in only 1 stanza.
2: Your meaning is unclear, and extremely foggy.
3: There doesn't seem to be any emotion put into it.
You've just made the 3 biggest mistakese a poet can make in 1 stanza...congratulations...
Good...um...try...?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This poem speaks to me in so many ways. It's only a few sentences long, but it says so much.
'buy' should be 'by'.

Posted 6 Years Ago


thanks allie for the criticism.
its refreshing. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1:There are tons of spelling errors...I think you've broken a record for the most mistakes in only 1 stanza.
2: Your meaning is unclear, and extremely foggy.
3: There doesn't seem to be any emotion put into it.
You've just made the 3 biggest mistakese a poet can make in 1 stanza...congratulations...
Good...um...try...?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good write!! love it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice and direct--eloquent in its simplicity and spartan lines. Good work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Short, but gives the reader exactly what they need. Nice!

~!Be Your Own Hero!~

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on April 11, 2011
Last Updated on February 17, 2015
Tags: moon, aaron, loneliness, bitterness, love, alone, stars, far, away

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aaron
aaron

San Antonio, TX



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Hey all! My name is Aaron G. I just got back to this sight and edited all my poems. Mostly grammar and flow. However I’m glad to be back, and hopefully while I’m at work I can come up with.. more..

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