Thoughts of you

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

Reviews

[Devons]

I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

[Miss Coral]

Nice, tight rhyme scheme, and wonderful metaphors. However, you repeated words quite often... I would go through and broaden the vocabulary of this piece a bit. Otherwise, a great, simple, and descriptive piece. Nice job. c:

[Cassiopia Summers]

I like this poem(: I can feel the caring in it. It's really nice. (:

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on this great winning poem. Well Done!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Wow!!! applauds..for devon's review says it all..you have such a rich vocabulary..you ought to be proud of it..wonderful..

[Alana]

This was art set in motion, flowing and falling, languid and perfect. I love your rhyme scheme, and the imagery and diction left me breathless. "A halcyon eternal dawn/When kissed by thoughts of you" - this line is stunning, the way you describe the thought of a person as akin to a kiss... it adds just a level of beauty and depth. This is a true expression of the heart. And then when you go on to "Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-/The sky runs out of praise./It bursts at seams or so it seems -/You've set it all ablaze", it's just fantastic. You went above and beyond the expression of emotion, and turned it into a fine art to indulge the senses. Thank you for sharing this phenomenal piece.

[Rose Tyler]

Excellent, excellent! Nest love poem I have read since I can remember reading. Most love poems, if not written by a true writer, come out as rip you heart out or mushy nasty. but this; this is a work of art.

[Rosalind Dee]

1 word.WOW!

[thedaydreamer]

I am not sure if "scorching" can be used as an adj to brightness. Most often it is used to qualify heat. Secondly, the word "halcyon" is meant as an adj here, so it should prefix a word. (halcyon dawn ?)

That apart I just love the poem. The alliteration, the rhyming is very consistent and accurate. The description of the early day morning is actually the best part. You have really made it very vivid, as ever.

"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.".... Great lines. The beautiful scenario as the morning sky needs such great words to transform them to paper.

You are humble when you say, you aren't a good writer. I believe, you are.

:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

My heart be still, such rhythm and rhyme, you are my hero.......lovely!

[Bunny Thumper]

BEAUTIFULLLLL!!
fuckinnn awesommmee ..
Damn man you rockk!