Dancing with her

Dancing with her

A Poem by Abdul Aziz

She's bathed by nectar from a bleeding rose,

She's draped by sunshine and morning yellow.

She tastes of honey and smells of musk,

And sounds like violin kissed by cello.

 

She looks like a million dreams of yore;

She walks like a song, pure and free.

Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;

And every word she speaks is poetry.

 

She smiles like the sky in its bluest hour,

Her face is chiseled by God's own hands.  

Her eyes radiate like the sleepy moon;

My heartbeat is in their command.

 

She wears my dreams effortlessly;

She slips into them every night,

To dance her way into my heart,

With uncut love and soothing delight.

 

I do not want to live forever

When I can sway here in her breeze;

And see her slip into my dreams;

And dance to love's serene decrees.

© 2010 Abdul Aziz


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Wow.. this is a fiercely passionate piece that is mesmorizing and lyrical to the max! Loved the rhythm, rhyme and beat.. can well see this played in song! Also a very high tribute to someone of very high praise in your heart! Loved the entire piece the stanza:

She looks like a million dreams of yore;
She walks like a song, pure and free.
Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;
And every word she speaks is poetry.

this is a poem in itself.. lucky woman to have such admiration on so many levels! Beautiful and intoxicating.. fantastic work that goes to my favs!

Posted 10 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.




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A very lovely poem. I felt that the meter faltered in a very subtle way, but it was negated by the brilliant beauty of your words. My particularly favorite line was the first one. That is just pure genius!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Abdul Aziz

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Spectacular piece! Loved this Abdul! You do great work and I love reading your work.

This: "And sounds like violin kissed by cello." Brilliant. Loved it. The image of this popped into my mind and made me smile.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I can see why flawed was inspired....super good stuff, "she wears my dreams effortlessly" is a great line. Nice work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I felt the need to review since I was sneaky and put this in my library a few days ago. When I read 'Dancing with her', Lord Byron's poem "She walks in beauty..." surfaced in my mind. Both have a transcendental quality that grabs my hand and carries me away much like the sway and crescendo of a lover's dance. The piece is lyrical and embraces the reader like a fine, swirling mist. This poem captivates with such raw ardor and seamless rhythm.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

that was a really meaningful poem. you made the her sound like an angel

Posted 9 Years Ago


bhai ! when did you mature so much as a poet ??? what have you penned down here !! now i need to bow down to you too cause this is one of the best works i have across on WC ... this goes into my favourites . keep writing and sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I just realized I hadn't yet reviewed this and it jolted me awake quite violently. Then I read it, and your words soothed me into a glorious, dream-like state.
How am I supposed to pick a single languid line? It would be like plucking one petal from a rose, this is to be taken in as a whole. Each stanza adds a new level of beauty; you and your crazy imagery makes my soul ache.
To top it all off, I feel incredibly honoured to know what this is about, and truly, it completely alters my perception. You see the world in such an exquisite manner, and pen your thoughts to bewitch us all.
100/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your poem is amazing. Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


One of the few outright love poems i read that didn't come off as corny. This was passionate and beautiful and the latter word I don't use often. Go around reading this to girls and I guarantee you'll get laid more than once LOL

Posted 9 Years Ago


such a beautifully written piece... Very sweet and filled with passion...
I love all the details, it paints a wonderful picture of love...

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Abdul Aziz

Chennai, Tamil Nadu, India



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