I'm Fine

It wasn't funny but I laughed;

Are you really that daft?

It should have been a tale-tell sign

When I said "I'm fine."

With all the time we have spent,

You should have known what I meant.

Author's Note

I have two versions of my poem on here and I would like to know which one sounds better, so please let me know and I will change it later on.

I chose the second, I thought it had a better rhythm to it and others liked it better as well.

Reviews

[Matt Sayer]

Those two short words, an entire parable concealed behind their simple facade. Complacency, misery, fear, despair; inflection and urgency can tweak the phrase in myriad ways. For two connected, the surface-level words are meaningless; it's what lies beyond that holds value. A very incisive poem, Anna. Well done :)

(BTW: The second version takes my preference)

[Sami Khalil]

Hard choice. Both are good...:).............

[Ees]

I personally prefer the second version, but I really dug both. I could totally relate. I know the feeling. I think that I did that on thursday... ahh. But yes, I felt like the second one was easier to get into.

Great job with these!

[Anna Blackburn]

Looks like the second is going to be the one I choose. Thank you for reviewing. :)

[Clairvoyant]

Oh goodness, this is a hard choice. I really like them both, and the message you are sending across. I think if I had to choose I would choose the second one. I feel like calling him daft should be right there and upfront. Both are wonderful though!

[Anna Blackburn]

Thank you for the suggestion. I wrote the first one, but then thought the second would sound better. I also like them both, but preferred the second.