Lover's Gravity

Lover's Gravity

A Poem by Gamitsuki
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Love is what makes us whole....It gives us what even the world's rich of the richest together can't give....that's warmth of heart......

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Lover's Gravity

                    
                     -by Gamitsuki

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Let me go, let me fall,

Let me see you or my heart will stall,
Let me depart you the crimson rose, my heart tend,
Let me take in every moment we spend,
Let me feel, sacrilege you,
Let me touch you as the sun descends to.

Let me show you what my mortal love is,
Let me give you a warm hug; and an eternal kiss,
Frame these memories dear; think again- and miss.

© 2015 Gamitsuki


Author's Note

Gamitsuki
I hope you enjoy....I am writing after some time period.....so i would gratefully accept any comments.....any improvements or anything you think.....thank you for reading....

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your piece is a blend of melody and passion. Loved it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

thank you so much for your great comment, my friend......i appreciate it...
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It's so nice. I loved the choice of words and the rhythem ... keep it up. "Frame these memories dear; think again- and miss." this sentence keeps playing in mind.. how beautiful is that!


Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

i am so glad you enjoyed it mai.......thank you for your comment....it holds a great value for me..... read more
A wonderful poem with a unique flavor as you immortalize love to eternity and back. Excellent. .....:).....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

Sami Khalil: thank you so much...bt can't be better than u....;-)))....i appreciate it very much....
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

You are so kind. You are welcome. .....:)......
Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

My pleasure....
Beautiful. Absolutely no improvements in my opinion that is.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

KyleEastman01: thank you so much for your comment and thank you for reading..... ;-))
This just sooo beautiful, and relateable! i can relate to it, and say that i agree with the statement in the description... Love is what makes us whole, and it can not be replaced by anythin else, and it can not be purchased. Excellent poetry.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

I am so glad that you enjoyed it.....thank you so much... :-)))
And yes, love really is such .. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

6 Years Ago

Yes it is. You are welcome :)
This is really interesting- it's English yet it reads in a similar format to Asian poetry. I like it, it's a different style! Well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

@Siobhan: thank you very much for the compliment... :-)) though English is not my native language..... read more
I can't say it enough, writing in English when it is not your native language is the hardest thing in the world to do. Strong emotion and intense passion in this poem, so well done :~)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

thank you so much.... :-)))
It's a good, strong piece, actually. Many thoughts and feelings of emotion here, and I rather enjoyed the soft, sensual flow you had going for it. Very nice, my friend. Keep writing. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gamitsuki

6 Years Ago

writerman120: thank you very much.....i appreciate it very much.....i haven't written anything over .. read more

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Added on July 25, 2015
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Tags: love, gravity, crimson, colorful, memories, you, me, unconditional, mortal, touch

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Gamitsuki
Gamitsuki

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I am a boy who loves singing, poetry, athletics, writing, studying, etc. I like to make friends and sometimes I over-do it. I love my mother very very much. When I was small, I had got a neck disab.. more..

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