Lover's Gravity

Love is what makes us whole....It gives us what even the world's rich of the richest together can't give....that's warmth of heart......

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Lover's Gravity
                    
                     -by Gamitsuki
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Let me go, let me fall,
Let me see you or my heart will stall,
Let me depart you the crimson rose, my heart tend,
Let me take in every moment we spend,
Let me feel, sacrilege you,
Let me touch you as the sun descends to.

Let me show you what my mortal love is,
Let me give you a warm hug; and an eternal kiss,
Frame these memories dear; think again- and miss.

Author's Note

I hope you enjoy....I am writing after some time period.....so i would gratefully accept any comments.....any improvements or anything you think.....thank you for reading....

Reviews

[Wordzika]

your piece is a blend of melody and passion. Loved it!

[Gamitsuki]

thank you so much for your great comment, my friend......i appreciate it...

[M]

It's so nice. I loved the choice of words and the rhythem ... keep it up. "Frame these memories dear; think again- and miss." this sentence keeps playing in mind.. how beautiful is that!

[Gamitsuki]

i am so glad you enjoyed it mai.......thank you for your comment....it holds a great value for me....

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful poem with a unique flavor as you immortalize love to eternity and back. Excellent. .....:).....

[Gamitsuki]

Sami Khalil: thank you so much...bt can't be better than u....;-)))....i appreciate it very much....

[Sami Khalil]

You are so kind. You are welcome. .....:)......

[Gamitsuki]

My pleasure....

[KyleEastman01]

Beautiful. Absolutely no improvements in my opinion that is.

[Gamitsuki]

KyleEastman01: thank you so much for your comment and thank you for reading..... ;-))

[Dani The Unreviewed]

This just sooo beautiful, and relateable! i can relate to it, and say that i agree with the statement in the description... Love is what makes us whole, and it can not be replaced by anythin else, and it can not be purchased. Excellent poetry.

[Gamitsuki]

I am so glad that you enjoyed it.....thank you so much... :-)))
And yes, love really is such a happiness that comes to one with that warmth in the heart....

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yes it is. You are welcome :)

[Siobhan]

This is really interesting- it's English yet it reads in a similar format to Asian poetry. I like it, it's a different style! Well done

[Gamitsuki]

@Siobhan: thank you very much for the compliment... :-)) though English is not my native language....i wrote what came out for heart. thanks again.....:-)))

[Bear]

I can't say it enough, writing in English when it is not your native language is the hardest thing in the world to do. Strong emotion and intense passion in this poem, so well done :~)

[Gamitsuki]

thank you so much.... :-)))

[writerman120]

It's a good, strong piece, actually. Many thoughts and feelings of emotion here, and I rather enjoyed the soft, sensual flow you had going for it. Very nice, my friend. Keep writing. :)

[Gamitsuki]

writerman120: thank you very much.....i appreciate it very much.....i haven't written anything over some time so this comment is exceptionally good for me.....again thank you for reading.... :-))