shadow

shadow

A Poem by Adalia

i'm a forgettable shadow- i've always been. 
sneaking into the lives of people, only to have them blow me out like a candle, and forget about it. i am the smoke that lingers- never forgetting the flame.
the smoke that looks back, still caring.
the smoke that wishes things could be the same.
the smoke caused by the person who got rid of the flame.
just a wisp that is so trivial, no one would care if it was there or not.
sometimes
i wish
people actually could care
and remember
the smoke.

© 2011 Adalia


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The ending is magnificent. I'm absolutely in love the imagery. Cutting off "I am" in the second line really emphasizes the smoke, and there's a lot to see just in the formatting of this poem. Like I said before, the ending really seals the deal. It wraps up the poem, all the while presenting the one wish of the persona in its rawest form: to be remembered. Great job, giiiiiirl.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This was great... So creative... Well done!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


The ending is magnificent. I'm absolutely in love the imagery. Cutting off "I am" in the second line really emphasizes the smoke, and there's a lot to see just in the formatting of this poem. Like I said before, the ending really seals the deal. It wraps up the poem, all the while presenting the one wish of the persona in its rawest form: to be remembered. Great job, giiiiiirl.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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