Pretending to pray

Pretending to pray

A Poem by adichie
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A woman speaks her mind to a wayward fool of a man.

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One long year ago
you had made me a vow
yet sometimes I wonder
if you could speak now
would you worship my body
for life and a day?
Maybe it’s me
but you’re pretending to pray.

We walk down the street
A lovely walks past
her static compels you
love falls to half mast.
Ignite the wrong spark
and in broad light of day
You’re clasping my fingers
while pretending to pray.

Out at a party
late in the night
I feel how you wish
that you may and you might.
Her star in the shadows
tempts gazes away.
You’re seated beside me,
pretending to pray.

I know fortune favours
the brave and the bold
So make no mistake.
I am rarer than gold.
I am splendour and sunbeam
entrusted to you,
yet you’re gaping at tinfoil
believing it true.
Treasure the sunlight, or be on your way.
Lift your sights, like a man.
Look at me when you pray.

© 2019 adichie


Author's Note

adichie
I love rhyming poems. Hope you do, too.

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I liked the honest words in the story in the poetry.
"Treasure the sunlight, or be on your way.
Lift your sights, like a man.
Look at me when you pray. "
I do like the above lines. When the love is true. We can see our love only. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the wisdom in your comment, Coyote. This poem was inspired by a married man I kn.. read more
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.



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You have done it again! I am Speechless.

This whole thing is amazing but I do enjoy the ending “Look at me when you pray” ugh..such a yin and yang feel throughout and that..that line just finished it perfectly.

Literally keep this up Sis. You’re intriguing my mind and I love writing like that! Once again kudos!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Oh thanks, Nefertiti!!! Smiling away.

I actually wrote a different ending to this sa.. read more
wow, i love this one...."gaping at tinfoil"
You had better look at me when you pray...
quit wishing you were free to go after someone else, because soon you will be alone, with no one.
excellent metaphor mixed into this poem with a real attitude.
j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Oh, bless you!!! I wrote this one on behalf of a wife whose husband was boasting about looking at o.. read more
This is a great combination of all the things I love about poems, particularly your strong rhyme & rhythm. I love that your rhyme & rhythm are comfortable in the background while your message shines thru with the most powerful ideas & details. You are very clever at turning a phrase ("love falls to half mast" . . . "wish that you may & you might") sounding original & flippant. Even tho you're pretty much telling a guy off in this poem, I love that you do this with respect, not grinding rage or blame. This is a great way to chastise someone gently & your title phrase is well-crafted & used (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Haha! Thank you so much for a beautiful comment! You can’t see me, but every part of me is twink.. read more
barleygirl

4 Years Ago

Awesome imagination! *smile*
I like this one! Very good!


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Thanks very much, and thanks for considering me a friend!!! :):)

Adix
Lea Sheryn

4 Years Ago

You're welcome. It's nice to know you. :-)))
I liked the honest words in the story in the poetry.
"Treasure the sunlight, or be on your way.
Lift your sights, like a man.
Look at me when you pray. "
I do like the above lines. When the love is true. We can see our love only. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

adichie

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the wisdom in your comment, Coyote. This poem was inspired by a married man I kn.. read more
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.

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