Cut Me Open; I'm Already Dead

Cut Me Open; I'm Already Dead

A Poem by Aekmy

Love isn't innocent. Perfection isn't perfect. People change.
Your honesty and my stubbornness have killed us both.
Suck up, say you're sorry, kiss over the phone.
It's the same story, we're just never done.
Happiness is harder to come by today than it was years ago.
We look at our elders, think it's easy, and break a bone.
Trying so hard to make things right, we cry.
Our emotions show, we curse.
Say you're sorry. You never meant that. Take it back. My heart is breaking.
Murder me with your words. Throw something back at me.
I'll catch it and throw it right at your face.
Two can play this game.
He loves me. He loves me not. He loves me. He loves me not. He loves me.
My heart wants to believe every word, to give into your plea,
but my brain is being rational.
Love isn't real.
We're living in a world of false emotions and a higher power.
My perspective is skewed. Kill me now.
I feel like popping open a vein.
Don't tell a single soul.

© 2010 Aekmy


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wonderful stuff

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like this. It's very direct and open.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A very powerful and direct poem :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


very powerful and emotional

Posted 9 Years Ago


First off, why the centered stanzas? I’m just curious why folks prefer that; I could understand if it was Concrete Poetry, but I don’t think that’s the case here.

Also, is there a rhyme scheme here? Some stanzas the rhyme feels stronger than others and reader’s ear starts to predict the echo. Take the final stanza versus the 2nd to last, for instance.

That’s structural, as far as tone and message, this poem is a little too overwrought for my tastes. Stuff like ‘kill me now’ and ‘love isn’t real’ and ‘Love isn’t innocent’ is like Hot Topic Journal Entry and doesn’t do the rest of the piece justice.

Regards,

E


Posted 9 Years Ago


Such a powerful write that is full of emotion. The last stanza is my favorite, though I feel that it builds fairly well. The speaker's words come off as brutally honest, as well as down right heart-wrenching, as stated in another review below. Overall, fantastic write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow, that's a beautiful and emotional poem. A vivid imagery, and very well written. Amazing, keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


heart wrenching poetic straight to the center of reason~

Posted 9 Years Ago



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