Forever

"Forever..."

a word overused

a word misunderstood

It is but a moment

not longer than it should.

"Forever..."

has been heard

in lifetimes before

It lost its glitter--

a treasure no more.

"Forever..."

said they

in the heat of romance

empty, nothing

desperate call for chance

"Forever..."

said he

my lover, only one

I woke up one day

and found him gone.

"Forever..."

a word he overused

a word I misunderstood

It is but a moment

not longer than it should.

Author's Note

Who hasn't used it?
Who hasn't believed it?

Reviews

[m.s.early]

This is captivating. Perhaps not misunderstood, but justifiably mistrusted.

The form is very beneficial to this poem's presentation.
You use the repetition wisely and effectively.

Great job Arzel :)

[Blue]

I like that. "Justifiably mistrusted". Thanks a lot, Silver.

[Annabelle Lee]

Gorgeous poem, loved this one very much

[Blue]

Thank you, Anna.

[Scott Metro]

Very true...
Excellent observation..
Enjoyed it.
Scott

[Blue]

Thank you, Scott!

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott.....

[Jack...]

The word is so often used it almost has no meaning anymore. Very nicely written and I liked the scattered format. Very cool my friend.

[Blue]

True, Jack. Thanks a lot. I was inspired by others' daring experiments with structure.

[Frieda P]

Sigh, we all believe it to be true, or hope in our heart of hearts it will last a lifetime. How did you get so wise at such a young age you teenage nutter? This one kind of smacks you in the face, and makes you shake your head.....yep.

[Blue]

How did I get so wise? I go out, see? :P Thank you, mother nutter!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Forever like time...
are not meant to specify...
a meaning --
yet is a statement of the mind...
to get a point across ---
in a favorable attempt...
Like --- I will forever love you in time...
for example ---
has lots of meaning...
but hard to live by...
yet -- gets the issue across rather fast...
penetrates the receiver --- a point of no return...
I read one today based on this style...
EE Cummings...is the author of such writes...
If I remember correctly...
read so much in a day ---
they all become one complete sentence...
Well-versed and keep doing what you do...

[Blue]

You blew me away with this review, Glen. You are an inspiration. Thank you for your insightful review!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...I'm healthy again...so I will be around a bit more...a cough here and there...but feel much better after being ill for a month form surgery...

[Bowers]

wow, what a great message you've written here, I love it! I seriously envy your writing! (You are SO talented) Great write! You've brought reality to a whole new level, and have done a wonderful job doing so!

[Bowers]

Also, I love the lay out of this poem!

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Bowers. You have no idea how much I appreciate your words.

[Bowers]

:) Your are absolutely welcome, I know how much reviews mean to me, and others must feel the same :D

[Dhaye]

I admit...I'm a believer, sis. LOL

I love the format and the concept of this piece.

I won't explain anymore. Pax have told you my stand. I'm just a romantic one. LOL

Thanks for the share. Your page is like a variety show and all readers surely enjoy each unique piece here. Keep shining, sis!

[Blue]

So sweet as always. Haha. Thank you, Ate. :)

[Rogie-Dodge]

The repetition of the first verse at the end makes this a never ending cycle of too many forevers that end too soon.

I love the treasure that has lost its glitter .. beautiful metaphor

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Rogie! :)