To That One Boy

To That One Boy

A Poem by Blue

There's that one boy before I sleep
His love paints blushes on my cheeks
And mem'ries new and old I keep
Consoling mournful days and weeks
For fate deprived his face to me
This cruel curse between this space
Took form of hateful, monstrous sea
One lover's stuck in a wrong place

Convert these tears to pieces gold
Purchase a wish without delay
That he, this instant, be within hold
And in my arms forever stay.

© 2015 Blue


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Great flow, and beautifully written.
I love the way you've rhymed it too.

I can relate a lot to this one.
Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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jb
Very sweet poem :).........

Posted 6 Years Ago


What a perfectly penned sonnet, flawless iambics and emotes as should someone who shadows shakespeare's lovelorn ways... wonderful and well done...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Very nice poem Blue.......I wonder....if there's someone who thinks that way about me. lol

Posted 7 Years Ago


hey hunny it has really been a while since ive been through any of your poems,,the title caught my attention on this one very well written indeed and yep there always is that one boy..lolx

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Gee
Convert these tears to pieces gold,
purchase a wish without delay,
that he be here now in my hold,
eternally in my arms to stay.

This might work Blue if you do alter.
Enjoyed the read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well done, Blue, a nice youthful poem of joy and the longing of love.

Posted 7 Years Ago


this poem has such longing for the one who is far away---not within reach---you know i get this one...being in a long distance relationship--

so good to see you around again, Arzel Joy.

jacob

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like this a lot. It is hard to get the rhythm of this type of poem right. I have only one suggestion, a rework of the second last line "within hold" sounds somewhat awkward -- (mine to) (one to) or something in that line? Just a suggestion. Either way, nice write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Blue

7 Years Ago

Oh, I admit, that line sounds awkward indeed. Haha. But I need to maintain the rhyme... I'll get bac.. read more

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