MY HERO

The person who will fight the world for me 

The person who means everything to me

The man who always there to wipe my tears 

The man who always fights away my fears 

The angel who showed me how to love 

The angel who protected me when I was weak as a dove 

The guy who spent his teenage life working for me 

The guy who lives in hell just to give me a happy family 

The hero who burns himself just to give me light 

The hero who always shows me the right 

The dad without him I don't know where I would be

The dad who's little girl I am proud to be 

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Again, with so many reviews on the shelf there's probably little I can add. And if someone else already mentioned what I'm about to say, forgive me and move on. One question on the content or story line. In the middle verse you mention the "guy who spends his teenage life". Was this still referring to your dad? Also, the third line you could say 'The man who will always wipe my tears'. The next-to-last line instead of "The dad without him" you might say 'The dad without whom'. Your poem is wonderful as is. I'm just trying to offer something. I don't think it's right to just mouth repetitious praise like a rubber stamp on everyone's work. My honest opinion I will always give, only after I've actually read a piece several times and given it careful thought.

[Brittany]

I agree with the "whom"
Also I am assuming that your dad was young when you were born; hence, the 'teenage life' but perhaps it should be 'spent' rather than 'spends'

[Cole Hayley]

Beautiful poem afra :)

[Pax]

your a proud daddy's girl. well done.

[Corset]

what a beautiful tribute to the father, well done Afra!

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

"The angel who showed me how to love
The angel who protected me when I was weak as a dove"

That was like one of my major favorite lines i have ever read but omg i wish i had this dad but for me this will never happen this was great! the flow was beautiful the words just hit you so strong with emotion!!! and i just fell in love with it at the title great job sis loved it!!!

[Barbara Walker]

Real nice tribute to your Dad, though the teenage years part threw me off. Are you saying he became your father in his teenage years? Nice write!

[Jon Settle]

Beautiful piece of writing. I just love that I can see everything so clearly written. I can feel the burn, see the light, and most of all feel the love. It's simply amazing.

I do have one question though: third line of the first stanza, Did you deliberately leave out the "is"? "The man who (is) always there to wipe my tears." you're missing the verb and although I knew what you meant, I still had to read it a few times to make sure I was correctly understanding it. Other than this, I see nothing wrong with this poem!

[Debbie_Philly]

Awwww... this is really sweet !!! Loved it !!! :)

[Dean Kuch®]

This is a well written and thoughtful tribute to your Dad. I'm sure he is very proud of you!

[Beck Louise]

Awww sweet :)

[TPK Stories]

What a great tribute to your father....