MY HERO

The person who will fight the world for me 

The person who means everything to me

The man who always there to wipe my tears 

The man who always fights away my fears 

The angel who showed me how to love 

The angel who protected me when I was weak as a dove 

The guy who spent his teenage life working for me 

The guy who lives in hell just to give me a happy family 

The hero who burns himself just to give me light 

The hero who always shows me the right 

The dad without him I don't know where I would be

The dad who's little girl I am proud to be 

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Again, with so many reviews on the shelf there's probably little I can add. And if someone else already mentioned what I'm about to say, forgive me and move on. One question on the content or story line. In the middle verse you mention the "guy who spends his teenage life". Was this still referring to your dad? Also, the third line you could say 'The man who will always wipe my tears'. The next-to-last line instead of "The dad without him" you might say 'The dad without whom'. Your poem is wonderful as is. I'm just trying to offer something. I don't think it's right to just mouth repetitious praise like a rubber stamp on everyone's work. My honest opinion I will always give, only after I've actually read a piece several times and given it careful thought.

[Brittany]

I agree with the "whom"
Also I am assuming that your dad was young when you were born; hence, the 'teenage life' but perhaps it should be 'spent' rather than 'spends'

[Ceri]

This line: "The guy who lives in hell just to give me a happy family " I'd remove the "just", it interrupts the flow a little. Aside from that, I liked this poem; the structure was effective.

[mariah]

i think this was very sweet. though i was alittle confused, some of the lines dont make sense. but then again, there are some really good ones in here. the first sentance for the third stanza is beautiful. you did good, but i think you should try to fix some parts of it, like "The guy who spends his teenage life working for me." im not sure what you by this.
-mariah

[Josh]

I enjoyed reading this very much. This poem is wrote out of pure emotion and not out of the idea that you need to put a reason to each word, or for the poem to make sense to everyone in the same way. True poetry is not well thought out narrative but rather rambling of pure emotions that come to our mind when we sit before a screen or paper. You have captured that essence and I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work.

[afra]

thank you

[Dez H.]

I am a father of three and i have two little girls. I hope that when they grow up that i am the same hero that i am to them today. I love it.

[afra]

thanks you

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem. A parent must protect their children in good and bad times. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[afra]

thank you sir

[zainul]

I adore Afra for her love to dad.
I love her poem which is great.

[afra]

aww thank you

[GunMetal]

This was very sweet.

[afra]

thanks

[SlightlyOdd]

aww thats sweet although the phraseing here and repition are usaually tediuos you've managed to make it more pleaseing with the content although i cant say anything about grammer beacuse i usually lack is a very good poem

[afra]

thanks

[SlightlyOdd]

Your Welcome

[KennaLovesJake]

This dad must be very nice to do that all for his daughter. :) I liked the poem, though. It was nice, sweet, and it had a lot of feeling to it.

[afra]

thank you